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No... don't do it. I'm just a lost magical girl looking for mommy. :blob_aww:

I know... people need a shoulder to cry on. But there's a place for that. Discussions should address issues. :blob_melt:

For some reason, the answers are turning to venting. Maybe we should move the conversation to the general section. :blob_hmm: :blob_melt:

How many bots? :blob_hmm:

Is an author here who has completed a series (prequel), then made a sequel series with the author as a transmigrator (MC) in the prequel series? :blob_melt:

It's absolutely crazy! You two are giving lengthy constructive feedback as if you're exchanging love letters. Great job. :blob_melt: :blob_salute: Edit: Just a quick feedback. In the prologue, the narrative uses the first POV which is supposed to be subjective, but the narrative feels clinical...

Thank you for your feedback. :blob_melt:

Thank you for your feedback. :blob_salute: :blob_melt:

My brief comment is that your synopsis uses overly technical language. It might be suitable for computer science students... but the average casual reader might find it confusing. Furthermore, the synopsis focuses too much on world-building... which could potentially create cold distance for...

I don't know... where that conclusion comes from. Complimenting each other, regardless of gender, is polite and diplomatic. You might be more surprised... Arab men kiss each other on the cheek to maintain brotherhood. :blob_melt:

Maybe you mean... does this story have a hook that keeps readers reading the next chapter? Well, this is more of a preference and subjective matter. If you're targeting a specific audience (e.g., horror), your story might be good enough for them. But if you ask me, sorry... I'm not interested...

I appreciate your feedback. Pronoun issues?! That's certainly an issue... I need to check my work more carefully. Thank you. :blob_melt:

Thanks for your feedback, dude. :blob_salute: :blob_aww:

Thank you :blob_melt:

Thank you for your feedback. :blob_salute: :blob_melt:

Hook for My First Fantasy Romance Work Well, I'm trying to reactivate my old work. This is my only fiction that is not dark fantasy. It is a romance fantasy work with elements of drama, psychology, and josei. Here is the prologue (~1,8k words): My questions are more focused on the hook...

~400 words makes us think efficiently in writing. Lol

Are you asking satire? Try it: https://www.scribblehub.com/series/1903686/building-world-peace-with-my-bloodthirsty-demon-army/

In traditional fiction, the narrator plays a dominant role in driving the story, often adopting a fireside storytelling approach where the narrator acts as the storyteller. Problems arise when this practice is carried over into creative writing, as the reader can't interact directly with the...