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You know... why the sky rains when a character cries over the loss of a loved one. Or how the wind often ruffles characters' hair when they're indecisive (just look at the Pain vs. Naruto scene about the cycle of hatred). It's a dramatization technique of showing emotion through atmosphere...

If the story was told in the west, I would go east. :blob_upset: Edit: That fiction is going on my red list. I won't be opening it forever.

I've read 5 of your chapters. Here are my honest impressions based on my reading experience. In general, your chapters have a smooth flow. The paragraphs are also neat. Well, that's the strength of the narrative. Now, let's discuss the weaknesses of the narrative: First, the narrator's voice...

The sky was crying... :blob_aww:

Why not both? :blob_cookie: Edit: I've edited my chapters repeatedly (and I'm still not satisfied); meanwhile, new chapters continue to be released, albeit at a slower pace (one chapter per week). Honestly, I'm more excited about seeing the narrative improve than seeing engagement.

Congrats! Your fiction is listed in the "similar series" recommendations on the front page of my fiction. Honestly, your cover is aesthetically pleasing and elegant. I love it. :blob_melt:

This future narrative... goes beyond my narrative knowledge. I throw up my hands. :blob_upset:

Hmm... maybe I'll write an autobiography titled, "Eldoria: Journey of the Immortal Magical Girl". :blob_melt:

If you don't care about your thread, why should we care about your story?

To be honest... when I read your chapters, I encountered many narrative structural errors. But I ignored them. As the saying goes, "if the customer likes it, so be it." That's why I don't leave many comments. I let the general reader decide. Because if I dissect your chapters too clinically...

You don't need to worry about engagement. Your genres already guarantee they'll be read. :blob_melt:

As much as possible, reduce filter words in dialogue tags such as say, ask, answer, reply, etc. Filter words don't add value to your narrative except as a marker in dialogue. Instead of dialogue tags, you can use the following pattern as a marker: Action + Dialogue. For example: You can also...

Google doesn't require payment unless you upgrade your account to the premium version for more space. :blob_melt:

You may make many prologue threads. But put it in Feedback Section. Don't trouble the moderator. :blob_melt:

Use google photos. It's free. :blob_melt:

Don't open it... pink magical girl. I opened it and regretted it. It's Pandora's box. :blob_upset: