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Dude... what kind of POV are you using? Is it limited third POV? Is it objective/cinematic third POV? Is it omniscient third POV?

Do you mean by multiple POV? My fiction also has multiple characters, each with a different POV in each chapter. I want to narrate a vast and immersive world. The multiple POV approach suits my narrative purpose. Instead of having the protagonist travel the world, I narrate from the POV of...

Error Tolerance Between Story Content, Storytelling and Language Story content is what is told in fiction, including characters, worldbuilding, plot, and conflict. Storytelling is how the story's content is conveyed to the reader through narration so that the author's imagination can be...

Don't overdo sensory descriptions in a single scene. If you provide too many sensory descriptions, the reader may lose focus. Instead of trying to describe sensory details in detail, you can limit yourself to one or two sensory descriptions per scene. For example, when your protagonist...

Hmm... maybe this question is more appropriate to ask loyal readers who have already invested 24 chapters, dude. Or if you're also pursuing emotional depth for new readers, you might want to include brief, beautiful flashbacks during the battle, contrasting them with the present-day betrayal...

Hmm... I might be lacking context, dude. I might understand the protagonist's feelings a little bit. But I don't feel the betrayal. Making the reader feel the protagonist's feelings is one of the pinnacles of fiction. As a new reader just passing through, I haven't connected with the...

Dude... are the emotions you're referring to here that protagonist's anger at the betrayal?

Every time I read my old chapters... my fingers itch, wanting to fix them even though the chapters have been edited several times.

I've only presented the surface or the story's packaging in the form of tropes. Beneath the narrative's surface lies a subtext with profound thematic depth, even touching on sensitive topics. Of course, that's beyond the scope of this thread. I'd simply like to hear other authors' opinions...

Yandere is just a plot device. Imagine an OP older sister starting a war, killing hundreds of thousands, even millions, only to find her sister hiding from her.

My protagonist is female (I rarely write male protagonists). Also, the relationship between the antagonist and protagonist isn't based on lust, more like an overprotective older sister who won't hesitate to eliminate any potential threats to their relationship.

She's not just it... she's more like a yandere sister who wouldn't hesitate to burn the world to find MC.

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What do you think about yandere villainess as an antagonist to the protagonist?

What do you think about yandere villainess as an antagonist to the protagonist?

I'm not forbidding you from review swaps, promotions, or anything like that. You're free to promote your work as long as it's within the rules. But I have different priorities.

Personally, I also enjoyed your narration (the narrator's voice is hilarious). It felt like a stand-up comedian telling jokes in front of me. You have a good comedic foundation. However, if you narrated the comedy scenes more immersively, readers might be even more entertained. They might not...