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Nah I won't hurt your feelings. So first off, your synopsis, the summary of your story: Again, this isn't the first time I've seen authors who doesn't know how to write a synopsis. It's quite surprising that the number of authors who doesn't know how to write a synopsis is quite unexpected...

What the, you aren't even in scribblehub. Should I read the prologue? I guess I will skip it. Is your title <Overcome>? I saw you liking almost every reply Rookie.

Hello all. The madman here. I'm a writer that constantly gets into a bottleneck during writing. So once in a while I would pop into ScribbleHub forum and start choosing post randomly while giving criticism. I noticed there are many works that got taken by aliens before I get to criticise...

Since you screamed pity and was so desperate to get a feedback, so I will grant you your wish. Putting aside all similarities it had to do with the other works, I will be criticising based on your work alone, and not others. Hmm, since I'm on a feedback spree again, I guess I would have to put...

Hey there, after seeing that sad looking reply after one day and twelve minutes from your post, I'm here to bash your face and ego, like literally. So here's what every fresh starter is going to have this idea: I write because I think you have ideas, but I write simply because I want to write...

So... let's start with the synopsis. I wondered why, but you started with something like a quote. There’s a vagueness in the wording that may makes it hard to grasp. You can convey the sense of an overwhelming presence of the unknown without repeating the idea of “something I don’t know”...

I reallyyyyy want to give it a go. Are you still available? I only need the first two chapters. https://www.scribblehub.com/read/211234-the-impossible-fate-that-leads-to-a-god-of-a-new-world/chapter/211238/

First off, your summary: Grammar and sentence structure: Phrases like “a war broke down” should be “a war broke out.” Sentences are run-on or missing punctuation. Tense inconsistencies (“Years had been passed” → “Years passed,” etc.) Clarity and flow: The relationships between characters and...

Made some edits during these months, so please read only first 5 chapters.

Rewrote three chapters. If anyone is willing to take a look and roast, will be much appreciated.

Give me one. https://www.scribblehub.com/series/211234/the-impossible-fate-that-leads-to-a-god-of-a-new-world/

It's rare, but it exists. I'm one though.

A second attempt. Only rewrote five chapters, please roast me. https://www.scribblehub.com/read/211234-the-impossible-fate-that-leads-to-a-god-of-a-new-world/chapter/211238/

I had Ankylosing Spondylitis, chicken pox, influenza, allergic conjunctivitis, eczema, at the same time, great, what's next?

Re-edited Synopsis & Chapter 1 as it was... roasted mercilessly, kek. Would appreciate the feedbacks for Chapter 1.

Shameless of me to request, Tempokai-sama. Would you care to give this edited prologue another go? Just one. I've tried. https://www.scribblehub.com/read/211234-the-impossible-fate-that-leads-to-a-god-of-a-new-world/chapter/211238/

Thank you very much Tempokai-sama. :blobtaco: In simpler words, I wasn't able to tell what I was writing in this story. You see words, you see action, you see scenes, you see what the MC is doing, but when adding all up, it's just a bunch of words forcibly glued together to make a story...

Ahhh, I see. That's what I meant by a [???]. Save the scheme for your readers. It was.

Yes, as I mentioned. No offence, man. If I were to use my brain, I were to read a step-by-step hundred pages manual on how to create sticky bombs so I could bomb off that annoying dog next to my house who barks like a recorder. I thought reading is supposed to be a relaxing thing. I don't...

Might suggest you to change to a bolder font without ITALIC so that I wouldn't have to squint my eyes so hard and tilt my head ever so slightly just to read a narrative paragraph. But, I'm not sure whether ITALIC is necessary in a narrative though. Suit yourself. First, I start with the title...