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  1. Eldoria

    How do I stop writing (I) in my first-person POV novel.

    So why not use the atmosphere to represent the character's emotion? This way, the environmental descriptions aren't just empty settings but have emotional meaning. For example, when the protagonist stares at the sky in a dark room, she's not just seeing a dark sky, but rather reflecting her...
  2. Eldoria

    How do I stop writing (I) in my first-person POV novel.

    In the context of first POV, white space syndrome usually occurs because the author focuses too much on the character's internal thoughts rather than interacting with their environment. The solution is simple: narrate your protagonist actively interacting with the environment and use the...
  3. Eldoria

    Writing the Concept of Voidmeister Martial Arts.

    Hmm... I'm not sure. Is this technique similar to senjutsu (senin mode) in the Naruto series? Well, at least it's explained through a demonstration in action instead of an info dump delivered by an omniscient narrator. So, narrative-wise, it's pretty immersive.
  4. Eldoria

    I would like feedback on my first series (plus 2 chapters)

    Dude.. I've read 2 chapters. I want to ask what kind of POV you're using? Is limited third POV? Or is objective third POV? Or is omniscient third POV?
  5. Eldoria

    Writing Starting from the ground up.

    Summon @Hans.Trondheim I once read his answer regarding a problem similar to your case.
  6. Eldoria

    Writing Fictional race/ethnicities in story vs real-life counterparts

    Eh... do readers think that way? If so, their priorities might be misplaced. There are even more extreme narratives like murder, r*p*, and genocide, which are often the main conflicts in mainstream stories. Will the author be labeled as glorifying those atrocities simply because they include...
  7. Eldoria

    New author wanting feedback

    Well, I've read chapter 1. I'll try to be honest and gentle (I guess). To be fair, I'll give you one strength and one weakness of your narrative. (I'm also too lazy to write down every strength and weakness of your narrative. Lol) In general, your narrative is easy to visualize. The atmosphere...
  8. Eldoria

    Craving feedback vs. Staying motivated

    When I first started writing fiction, I wasn't concerned with how many readers would read it; I was concerned with the content of the story, which subverted mainstream tropes. I cared more about what I wrote than what others thought of it.
  9. Eldoria

    Do My First 30 Seconds Set The Wrong Tone?

    If you're writing a slow burn focused on a single character, the most important thing is how to make the reader care about the character. Therefore, the opening should be used to introduce your character to the reader. Introduce your protagonist through action, dialogue, and atmosphere so that...
  10. Eldoria

    You don't have to be good at math to appreciate someone. :blob_salute:

    You don't have to be good at math to appreciate someone. :blob_salute:
  11. Eldoria

    Wow... looks like you @Rolanov have a similar case @CinnaSloth :blob_aww:

    Wow... looks like you @Rolanov have a similar case @CinnaSloth :blob_aww:
  12. Eldoria

    Wait a minute... something's weird... I thought Daeron was a man. Where did the female gender...

    Wait a minute... something's weird... I thought Daeron was a man. Where did the female gender come from?! :blob_teary:
  13. Eldoria

    Who are you? Bring back Daeron! :blob_teary:

    Who are you? Bring back Daeron! :blob_teary:
  14. Eldoria

    Looking for some honest feedback.

    If you were asking me about engagement in SH, I'd suggest you change your synopsis from a summary of the story to a relatable emotional experience character for the readers. Please use the following formula:
  15. Eldoria

    Looking for some honest feedback.

    I don't want to turn a fictional narrative into a complicated mathematical statistics table. Lol
  16. Eldoria

    Looking for some honest feedback.

    Well, not bad, dude. But my fiction here isn't one of those popular fictions that regularly trend.
  17. Eldoria

    Offering feedback on your first chapter

    Oh... you're back. Your patient's been waiting for a long time, dude.
  18. Eldoria

    Looking for some honest feedback.

    I just sympathize with your fiction, dude. The RR algorithm relies more on recommendations and ads than visibility. My fiction is also struggling on RR without any help, no ads, no review exchanges, just regular chapter releases. Besides, my fiction is quite niche. So, I don't have any good...
  19. Eldoria

    New Author Seeking Feedback

    Well, good luck. I'll be looking forward to seeing how you transform your narrative into something more in-depth from Lila's perspective. Regards. :blob_melt:
  20. Eldoria

    New Author Seeking Feedback

    Well, now I'll explain what I felt as a reader when reading chapter 1. Honestly, the atmosphere of your chapter 1 was good. The description of the environment was detailed. I liked it because I felt like I easily entered your story world, the visualization of the environment was very easy to...
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