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The thing is, I keep revising my stuff during the not-that-plentiful time I spend writing, so I end up finishing 1-2 ~1000 word chapters a week.

I'm going to comment and disappear how do you do.

Yeah, go the Frankenstein route. There are so many stories about monsters being op and killing things, choosing to do what they want, but so few are stories where they actually consider why they do so, why they exist, and all that mid-life crisis sort of things.

<- Chinese Seems good. Maybe the first name could use some more thought since it isn't that fluid when saying it though. Sort of like how in a conversation you sometimes slur words together to make it easier and more pleasant to hear. Like, "You know" becomes, "y'know" or "come on" becomes...

Also, I guess another problem is you posted it on spacebattles.com? Just looking at the website name makes me feel like that isn't a good place to write a story on.

Random online browser game that sort of tied its own noose: Slay.one I played it a lot when it was released and refuse to completely abandon it. Just a lot of positive memories, even though those memories probably won't return.

Sure.

Oh, yeah, its meant to be a synopsis. :D EDIT: At this point, its more of a way for me to flesh out the characters and get some feedback.

Thanks for the info, though when you say run down, how do you think it could be told better?

In general, I think they're only used as some sort of way to introduce new characters/help the character grow. Not sure what else though.

The I/we thing is seriously tripping me up.

I don't like the ones that lack character growth or the main character is so overpowered that the author is sort of forced to write the story slowly so that they don't instantly end the plot. Though the primary turn off for me are the ones that go like, "I reincarnated as a [insert random...

For me, the teaser came off as something you would normally find in an action/mecha(At least from what I've read?) novel. The characters did have some personality, but I don't think there was anything that interesting about it for me to latch on to that would make me want to binge read it.

I'm currently messing around with writing a prologue for my story, and it's reached the point where I'm looking for any sort of comments from an outside party. If there is anything you feel is a bit off, please let me know. The people described are meant to be vague since it takes place a while...

What I mean by a general sense of strength is that, why is listing their experience necessary? If you feel like they've been through something which is worth leveling up from, or had done enough of a simple task to level up from that, just make them level up. It's your story, so you should...

Eventually, I find almost every novel with a stat sheet gets boring as time passes. It might be interesting at first when there are only a few, but as they become longer and more and more op, I just breeze over them. If their stats and exp don't visibly appear, why not just keep a general sense...

Quick thing on how I would define the two: Plot- What is the actual thing the story is about (Character interactions, the end goal, world-building...) Flow- How immersive is the reading (Grammar, descriptiveness, understandable...) For me, I think that its more important for a story to have...

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