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Thanks for the help! I have little to no experience with writing about trauma. These helped a lot :D

I start with a premise and build from there. Like I think where I want it to go then add milestones or plot points I want to keep. Then I write as I go. Then discover things that I need to add or remove or maybe things I want to change. Then I edit the story. When it gets particularly bad...

Im working on a very short story. The premise is that the kid loves mermaids and her parents take her to this aquarium show to see the mermaids. However they dont make it to the show. Their car gets into an accident and the parents both die protecting their daughter. So now the kid is blaming...

Nice tips! I really do follow the 1st one in my recent writings. Seeing you share some advice I wanna share a tip that might be helpfull and one that I am going through currently. I hope you dont mind :) The tip is to not fear rewriting your work from the ground up. (Yes I mean rewrite...

Hmm... I don't have much time right now so I was only able to read your first chapter. My initial impression of it was pretty good, there are ways to build a little more impact and also some grammar errors to fix. I can write a more detailed review later on (I got 5 minutes till class so...

Hello I can give you some feedback for your first chapter. Most of my help is on the way you write so story wise I won't say much unless you want me to. Ok so first of all the POV is in first person which changes the dynamics and writing style. You have to avoid writing in a way that looks like...

So what do you want feedback on? Story and plot or grammar and diction?

It makes me hungry but I still read it hahaha if it gets unbearable I have a bag of chips beside me hahahaha

Looks really interesting! It looks fun to play especially for a casual player like me. It incorporates some survival aspects which make production type players really useful but most of all graphics are amazing. I look forward to being able to fly there tho it looks like it would be great!

Hmmm... traditional art is fun I especially love it when the colors balance out and have good contrast And if the POV is right and the proportions are right oh my goodness I swoon A fun medium to look at is watercolors and acrylics I find them pretty easy to handle after all.

Prompt: everyone uses wands and spells their voices as catalyst, their wands as channels the world is their canvass in this world a child is born she who cannot speak is unable to use magic wands do not respond to her but she holds the pen and that is all she needs

I can give help with your diction and grammar. Although I do not know how much I can help story-wise. I'll review your first chapter and if you want some more detailed critique there are other authors who can do so over here...

looks great! I'll try it out

Yessss theee areeeeee One on novel updates is called Gourmet of Another World ^I ABSOLUTELY LOVE IT I need more food novelssssss I've just read about almost every one on novelupdates I want it to be centered on the food itself like Gourmet of Another World So far haven't really read any on SH...

Hmmm mostly I place more detail when setting up a place or add a bit more words so I can set the mood. Then I use a lot less when there is some action going on. ^ thats my general workflow although I'm not sure if it will help.

Thanks all! The suggestions help!

As I continue to read the 1st chapter I can't help but comment. There is a certain part of the story where I am bombarded by adjective after adjective; descriptive detail after descriptive detail, and it feels overwhelming. There is also a repetitive use of words that can already be replaced by...

what would you usually do when you transition from one event to another aside from info dump?

When writing we have to string events together to form a cohesive story and timeline. Honestly I have the events in my head and what event happens after event A but I'm lacking in terms of transition. Like I'm unable to place a buffer between event A and event B and make it seem natural. It...

I prefer ships where the partners grow and support each other. Also I live for the overdose of sugar when the ship has sailed. AND!!!! NOT TO FORGET!!!!! I DISLIKE IT WHEN ONE PARTY IS TOO DOMINANT OVER THE OTHER THAT IT SEEMS LIKE THE OPINION OF THE OTHER IS IGNORED. ^ although other said...