Hello and Dear Gabrielle,
I would really appreciate if you took a glance at my LitRPG story. Also, I know where I'm lacking and I'm trying to improve.
https://www.scribblehub.com/series/1716414/the-succubus-and-the-maverick-litrpg/
Thank you for the advice.
Should I have my character be more upset like yell or break something?
Yes, my grammar is kinda wack. But I'm happy you said I improved. Also, should I not mention outfits at all? It is unnecessary?
Thank you very much, Vertis!
I know I gotta work on my grammar and once I finish the story that will be fixed. And I'll try and work on my character voice and emotion. Yes, those scenes are foreshadowing.
Hey guys!
I was wondering can I get feedback on Chapter 5 and what do you think of the new bookcover?
https://www.scribblehub.com/series/1422958/the-succubus-and-the-maverick-litrpg/
So, chapter 1 is unnecessary? Okay, I'll keep that in mind and get rid of that chapter once the story is complete. Btw, I appreciate all your suggestions and I will definitely take them to heart ?
StoneInky, you are pretty cool and insightful. If you can ever find the time to glance at my story again I would appreciate it. But if not that's fine, you were a big help and I might ask for your opinion on other projects of that's okay?
Well, if you like LitRPG than please check my story out of you have time?
https://www.scribblehub.com/series/1422958/the-succubus-and-the-maverick-litrpg/
Do you mind checking out my LitRPG story? Not sure if that's your thing though...
Right now, I'm writing more chapters but Im not posting them until May. Just wanna know your thoughts on the chapters I have up and how my MC functions as a person. Also, I wanna thank the 20 readers for checking out my story. Your awesome...