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Or just do a Shinju no Nectar and make the women just look like average humans lmao

Would help if you posted the link :blob_popcorn:

Based (not based when we have to write synopses tho LOL)

Damn, I missed the link (im suspecting OP removed it after the edit today lmao) Or just remove the what to expect section to improve it significantly :blob_evil:

Writing a parody doesn’t mean you can throw shit to the wind and wave everything away because “it’s a parody” lmao. As Charles said, parodies actually have more work put into them because you need to know what you’re parodying. Some of my favorite stories are parodies. Not because they’re just...

Well uh, you’re probably not gonna like this, but I honestly see little wrong with your prose lol. Just some nitpicky stuff. Scene setting, descriptions, and introductions are nice. But the dialogue at the end feels a little weird. It’s too on the nose. It feels less like a character talking...

Please for the love of god don’t start your first chapter with a long author’s note setting ground rules for the story AND maps and flags of not yet relevant nations :blob_no: I know this isn’t a real, official publishing website, but people still come in for a similar feeling. And getting...

No idea where this is coming from but I agree :blob_sweat: at least for the LN, if it weren’t for the art, shit wouldn’t be popular. Although I do like some of the world building, so I will be plagiarizing borrowing from it for my own stuff.

I want to end myself when I read something I wrote when I was 12. I can tolerate shit I wrote when I was 15. Every part of me dies when I read something from when I was 18. And I become my own biggest hater when I read something from when I was 23. But there are still nuggets in everything I...

I'm afraid it's time to end you buddy Anyway. I've only read chapter 1. Everything is extremely amateurish. The descriptions, the prose, the dialogue, and the energy you bring to the table as a first chapter. Bunch of one sentence strings of words that sort of don't mean anything yet. I mean...

Brother huuhhhhhhhh Why are you deleting and posting different messages. Why'd you remove your link. "Dead thread" dead thread my ass, threads don't die for like two years. Someone could've come around and taken a look at it. I know I did a couple days ago. Back then I decided I didn't want to...

To be fair, making a concise and effective synopsis is extremely difficult lmao :blob_popcorn:

Hey no worries man. I might've sounded harsh, but it's necessary. First up: There's a legitimate glossary section for your work in the series editor. Use that to your advantage for the people that want it. Second: Dialogue is tough as shit. People who have English as their first, primary, and...

As promised here I am. The story is not engaging. The grammar is decent. The pacing is nonexistent. The characterization, 404 not found. For the record, I stopped after looking at what chapter 3 may bring to the table. Chapter 1 sets the scene well enough. Decent description and imagery...

Jump the shark is before zoomers were born buddy lmao

Well you see, I’m plagiarizing concepts and character foundations from one of my favorite “visual novels”, so ion need to worry about it ?️ in all seriousness I just sit at my desk and slam my hand on my keyboard and fix the name up to match with my basic idea of the character, either showing...

Currently pretty busy today, so I took a quick cursory glance. I'll read what I can later, since I'm commenting, but I have to get this off my chest. Webnovels that have "guidelines" or "disclaimers" as an entire chapter before the story starts is extremely off-putting. Same with 70% of your...

Sadly the grammar was so poor I couldn't make it. Two different spellings of the same thing in the first paragraph? No thanks. This line did make me laugh tho lmao It's definitely 12 year old energy, but I'm down for an MC like that once in a while.

I would also like to know lmfao. How do you do it without significantly dumbing down other characters to make whoever you want feel smart. Like how the hell does that mf write Kingdom with insanely high iq characters. I think it’s all dependent on setup and information. Solutions should be...

Lmao, the outline for my first real story on here had it so that there was a new arc every 10 chapters. Well, they were less “arcs” and more change of location, but still. It unintentionally changed every ten lol.