Eldoria

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  • Eldoria
    Oh... now I might know why these people keep putting feedback request threads outside the feedback section.

    Because feedback threads placed outside the feedback section will appear in the forum trending on the SH homepage.

    Conversely, feedback threads in the feedback section will not appear. It's a bug.
    Eldoria
    I agree with a fan... as a teenager, you tend to care about Naruto's idealism. But as an adult, you tend to understand Pain's realism.

    In the real world, the realities of geopolitics, nations, and war more closely follow Pain's logic, especially regarding the deterrent effect.
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    Daeron
    Daeron
    Because Pain's realism easier to do than Naruto's idealism.

    While the common people live within Hashirama's principles :blob_hmm_two::blob_hmm_two:
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    Tsuru
    One thing that people pointed out (or at least i seen in CNs that are good at psychology)

    Naruto succeeded = because he is strong.
    Naruto = strength of a nuclear nuke x100.

    Countries were in peace during Hashirama era.
    He died ? Next day wars started.
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    Tsuru
    In short.

    Naruto is a naïve child, that think the world is sunny, that there is peace bc everyone became friends.
    Without knowing he succeeded only because everyone (especially villains and other Kages) are scared the shit out of him. AND/OR know they cant succeed at killing him and conquering Konoha. Or worse, pulverize their village with a RasenShuriken in 2s.


    Naruto is Pain.
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    Eldoria
    Write POV based on your character's voice. Let your character's soul guide you as you narrate what your character is doing 'right now' in their world.

    If readers say, "protagonist 'should' have done this or that..." Congratulations! You've created an authentic character that even readers found unsettling and irritating.
    Eldoria
    I stopped reading shoujo not because of the cliche tropes. It's just that... I hate it when the FMC gets taken by a random guy even though the fictional premise uses "family" labels: mother-daughter, father-daughter, brother-sister, and the like. I may be childish, but when reading fiction, I treat the FMC as my daughter. My feeling of my daughter being taken by someone else is too uneasy.
    Eldoria
    The relationship between author, fiction, and reader is like a symbolic contract. The author provides a narrative to the reader. Readers know the narrative is "fictional," but they are willing to be bound by the "lie" to achieve a sense of experience.

    Reading fiction means allowing the lie to "hypnotize" you. So, you can experience the "truth" of the sense of experience the author has crafted through narrative.
    Eldoria
    Narrating a child's first POV is one of the most difficult challenges in writting. Why?

    Because you need to "lower your intelligence" to the child's level. You can't use literary prose to narrate characters, worldbuilding, and plot.

    You need to lower your language to be simple and imaginative, appropriate to a child's psychological development. So, the POV feels authentically child's voice.
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    Makimaam
    Makimaam
    Also, it depends on the child’s age. Nowadays, if you ask a 5 or a 6yo why they could jump higher on the Moon than on Earth, some can tell you it’s because of the difference in gravity. Others might say they don’t know.
    Eldoria
    Eldoria
    Well, I already mentioned "...appropriate to a child's psychological development," meaning that narratives from a child's POV should be appropriate for their ages. Child developmental psychology theory explains how children's mental states are appropriate for their age. Authors need to understand children's mental states before writing about child's voice.
    Omarfaruq
    Omarfaruq
    I wouldn’t say it’s hard. you just need to be a little childish, like writing overly wholesome lines. I’m not saying it’s easy either, I’m just saying it’s not one of the hardest. Also, if your MC is a child, they must be exceptionally intelligent, or you won’t be able to justify why they’re the main character.
    Omarfaruq
    I want to write a tribute chapter inspired by your style—especially the single-mom theme. In this chapter, Avaris will be a single mother raising Arin and Lysa. My main character, Ilyas, will be shown as dead (this will be a non-canon chapter). I’m also thinking of mentioning your name in the author’s note.

    Is it okay if I do this?
    Eldoria
    Which is worse getting a low rating or getting no rating at all?
    Eldoria
    Pray for world peace...
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    Omarfaruq
    Omarfaruq
    Praying for world peace alone isn’t enough. Prayer without action won’t stop wars. People must be aware of political decisions, and we need leaders who resolve conflicts without violence. In short, real-world action has to accompany prayer.
    Nevafrost
    Nevafrost
    @Omarfaruq Absolutely agree. We don't need people who say, "I can die for my country." yes, you need to have the courage to die for your country. But you need to live the life of a martyr if you want to be one. Not many people can live for others and contribute.
    Omarfaruq
    Omarfaruq
    @Nevafrost hmm... I think my comments make sense. My previous comment was also agreed with by Meowjesty-sis and now Onee-sama.
    Eldoria
    When you write a narrative, you tend to write "what happened this chapter?"

    When you edit a chapter, you tend to read, analyze, refine and rewrite, "how do the scenes in this chapter provide a good reading experience for the reader?"
    Eldoria
    It makes sense why Pain was considered the peak arc.

    Instead of positioning Pain as a foreign enemy... the author instead made Pain Jiraya's student, a victim of war, and a senior (to Naruto). The conflict isn't just epic and ideological, but also intimate and emotional.

    Readers may disagree, but they can't deny that his wounds are real. That's why I consider Pain as a gold standard for main antagonists.
    Eldoria
    There are 4 types of feedback for fiction:

    (1) Content feedback (analysis of characters, worldbuilding, plot and conflict).

    (2) Storytelling feedback (analysis of POV, pacing, hook, etc).

    (3) Engagement feedback (packaging, release, and promotion).

    (4) Language feedback (prose, grammar and spelling).
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    Omarfaruq
    Omarfaruq
    There’s another type of feedback: giving a niche novel a one-star rating just because it wasn’t to your liking, without leaving any comment explaining why or what you disliked. I’m not accusing anyone—it’s just that some of my favorite novels, and even my own work, have received feedback like this.
    Eldoria
    Eldoria
    Some people do troll. I once received a 1 rating, but the account was reported and ratings were deleted.
    Omarfaruq
    Omarfaruq
    This type of feedback stings 😭
    Eldoria
    Comparing my narrative quality of the early chapters with the latest ones and concluding that there was a significant gap... making me happy and tearful.

    Happy because I saw progress in my narrative. Tearful because I needed more editing.
    Eldoria
    If 4 factors could converge in a story:

    Market taste + original (innovative) content + good storytelling + luck
    Click to expand...

    I'm pretty sure... a work would explode quickly and start a new trend.

    Unfortunately, 4 factors rarely align. Most works only fulfill 1 or 2 factors at a time.

    It's why masterpieces often become hidden gems. While, other works can quickly go viral.
    Eldoria
    I love reading poetic prose with personification, as atmospheres such as:

    Silence speaks louder than screams...

    Mist carry the breath of changing eras...

    The sun peeks through the leaves...

    The moon bears witness between you and me...

    Blood never lies...
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