Targeted Story Feedback Thread (READ THE NOTE)

blackcrowcrowd

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Greetings, fellow procrastinator but doesnt want to be called lazy so we end up doing every other things in the forum except continue writing our own story so we can lie to ourself and say i was productive at the end of the day.
Please give a taste of this happy mushroom called Building World Peace

Sincerely, me.

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Building World Peace with my Bloodthirsty Demon Army
Feedback type: How enjoyable is this?
Expected length: Normal

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Building World Peace with my Bloodthirsty Demon Army
Alright... I'm still considering whether to review the guy above you or just skip to yours. I read your first chapter's first few lines, it was pretty hilarious not gonna lie haha
 

Eldoria

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A bit of a disclaimer, I don't understand what the second and fourth point is, so I will just write according to what I understand from googling those terms.

REVIEW 2
Name: Blood Rose Princess Vol. 2 (sub-arc - Captain Reynard)
Description: A review on how the author handles sensitive content, alongside three other points (How do I feel after reading/closing the chapter, thematic depth, and characterization of a specific character)

Point 1) Well, after reading your chapter... let's just say it wasn't exactly an amazing experience. While reading the chapter, it doesn't really feel intense, but the information contained within are not fun at all. I could already see red flags appearing all over the place while reading the part where the Reynard dude married Safira and the few scenes after, so I already knew it would suck. And it did. Damn it sucks. Personally, during reading and after reading it, I felt terrible. Not the emo sadness kind, but the heart wrenching pain + the realization that this kind of stuff happens in real life too, which is double the terribleness. So... overall, I felt absolutely depressed reading this (bold for emphasis).
Thanks for your honest feedback, dude. Did you feel depressed after finishing the chapter?! :blob_aww:

Sorry, but I'm both happy and sympathetic to you. If you felt sad, then this chapter was a successful emotional immersion.
Again, I appreciate your honesty. :blob_salute:

Regards.
 

blackcrowcrowd

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Thanks for your honest feedback, dude. Did you feel depressed after finishing the chapter?! :blob_aww:

Sorry, but I'm both happy and sympathetic to you. If you felt sad, then this chapter was a successful emotional immersion.
Again, I appreciate your honesty. :blob_salute:

Regards.
You sound awfully enthusiastic... -_-
 
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