Okay so the edits turned to be a failure

[Rosica]

Hans, Hans, Hans.

Yes. Put a stop to this.

But first, please consider this question: Why are you writing in a language that is not your own? Why not write in your native language, and stay there?

Someone above says (with misplaced sympathy) that "some people are just biased against non-native English speakers." That's nonsense. Pure nonsensical virtue-signalling balderdash. IGNORE IT. This isn't a matter of fairness. "Bias" (whatever the bleep that means these days) doesn't enter into it. I happen to be a native English speaker. I don't force myself to read Korean, for sake of fairness. I don't struggle through Cyrillic, to virtue signal. English is my native language. I write and speak English. When reading, I expect the material to be correct. That doesn't make me a xenophobe. It's sensible. It's utilitarian. Language is utilitarian. I'm right-handed. I don't handicap myself, by writing with my left hand. English is my language. I don't handicap myself, by trying to write in Spanish.

Back to you, Hans. Write in your language. Write for readers in your language.

What? Too small an audience? Too many illiterates in your neck of the woods? Change that. Promote literacy. Mark Twain had precious few English readers here in post-Colonial America. He didn't move to Europe. He stayed here. He wrote here. He promoted literacy. He opened his own publishing house and sold his books door to door.

You can be the next Mark Twain. For your language.

The downside? You lose ten or eleven readers on Scribblehub and Royal Road. The upside? Who knows. People have won the Nobel Prize in Literature for promoting native language literacy. Did Gabriel Garcia Marquez write in English? No. Isabel Allende? No. Octavio Paz? No. Pablo Neruda? No. They were all translated to English. After they won the Nobel Prize.

Write in your language.

אַלץ וואָס דו זעסט אויף דער אינטערנעץ איז נאַרישקייט, אַרײַנגערעכנט די שורה דאָ, אַזוי גלייב גאָרנישט אָן צו פֿרעגן.

 

[Akkizakura]

Hans, Hans, Hans.

Yes. Put a stop to this.

But first, please consider this question: Why are you writing in a language that is not your own? Why not write in your native language, and stay there?

Someone above says (with misplaced sympathy) that "some people are just biased against non-native English speakers." That's nonsense. Pure nonsensical virtue-signalling balderdash. IGNORE IT. This isn't a matter of fairness. "Bias" (whatever the bleep that means these days) doesn't enter into it. I happen to be a native English speaker. I don't force myself to read Korean, for sake of fairness. I don't struggle through Cyrillic, to virtue signal. English is my native language. I write and speak English. When reading, I expect the material to be correct. That doesn't make me a xenophobe. It's sensible. It's utilitarian. Language is utilitarian. I'm right-handed. I don't handicap myself, by writing with my left hand. English is my language. I don't handicap myself, by trying to write in Spanish.

Back to you, Hans. Write in your language. Write for readers in your language.

What? Too small an audience? Too many illiterates in your neck of the woods? Change that. Promote literacy. Mark Twain had precious few English readers here in post-Colonial America. He didn't move to Europe. He stayed here. He wrote here. He promoted literacy. He opened his own publishing house and sold his books door to door.

You can be the next Mark Twain. For your language.

The downside? You lose ten or eleven readers on Scribblehub and Royal Road. The upside? Who knows. People have won the Nobel Prize in Literature for promoting native language literacy. Did Gabriel Garcia Marquez write in English? No. Isabel Allende? No. Octavio Paz? No. Pablo Neruda? No. They were all translated to English. After they won the Nobel Prize.

Write in your language. For your readers. And if you have no readers, make some.

אַלץ וואָס דו זעסט אויף דער אינטערנעץ איז נאַרישקייט, אַרײַנגערעכנט די שורה דאָ, אַזוי גלייב גאָרנישט אָן צו פֿרעגן.

여긴 인터넷이야, 모든 공감은 다 엇나가 있고 다 헛소리야. 완전 의미 없는 허세랑 위선뿐이야.

 

[Erysion]

Write in your language. For your readers. And if you have no readers, make some.

You can start by finding a person willing to be a reader. That's one. Make a baby with that person then teach the child to read. That's one more.

But why stop at one? The more the merrier!

There is no law against making more than one children with your readers.

Hope this help.

 

[Eldoria]

אַלץ וואָס דו זעסט אויף דער אינטערנעץ איז נאַרישקייט, אַרײַנגערעכנט די שורה דאָ, אַזוי גלייב גאָרנישט אָן צו פֿרעגן.

여긴 인터넷이야, 모든 공감은 다 엇나가 있고 다 헛소리야. 완전 의미 없는 허세랑 위선뿐이야.

You can start by finding a person willing to be a reader. That's one. Make a baby with that person then teach the child to read. That's one more.

But why stop at one? The more the merrier!

There is no law against making more than one children with your readers.

Hope this help.

You are a good girl.

 

[Erysion]

You are a good girl.

This isn't 1 April anymore. You can stop telling lies.

 

[JordanIda]

Or do what Mark Twain did. (Yeah... lots of words.... there's stuff in the middle......)

Had no readers. No book publishers. No book stores.

Wrote some books. Opened a publishing house. Sold books door to door. Expanded to mail order. Promoted literacy. Made readers, by encouraging people to read.

Mark Twain also promoted writers. Published their work. Created a book market out of nothing.

Hans, you say you're a teacher.

Write. And Teach.

 

[Erysion]

Or do what Mark Twain did. (Yeah... lots of words.... there's stuff in the middle......)

Had no readers. No book publishers. No book stores.

Wrote some books. Opened a publishing house. Sold books door to door. Expanded to mail order. Promoted literacy. Made readers, by encouraging people to read.

Hans, you say you're a teacher.

Write. And Teach.

Hans is a good teacher who did more to his students than anyone else in their life. I'm sure his students would be interested in reading his book.

All he need to do is ask.

 

[Makimaam]

But first, please consider this question: Why are you writing in a language that is not your own? Why not write in your native language, and stay there?

Wow.

Anyway.


@Hans.Trondheim My advice, having read through a chapter of your novel, is that you shouldn’t spend too much time on line editing. Refine selectively. Your prose is fine. It’s clear and readable. As a reader, I’m not particularly nitpicky about style or grammar unless it becomes jarring/ obvious.

What matters more to me is the plot, the structure, the characters. Go through your chapter and ask yourself: would I click “Next”? What compels me to keep reading? OR— Is my character likeable enough? OR—Is my concept fresh? AND—Is my hook strong enough to hold attention?

In the age of web novels, readers are spoiled for choice and impatient. Less is more. You don’t need to rely on AI to turn something functional and readable into something overly florid. Instead, take a step back and consider whether your chapter is structured in a way that leaves readers wanting more.

 

[JordanIda]

Hans, on second thought forget everything I said.

Take your beautiful words, run them through an auto-translator, and turn them into trash. Don't waste time with editing. Post the trash as is, and don't forget your Patreon link.

Here in web novel land, trash is good enough. Anyone who tells you different is just a mean-spirited, biased xenophobe who doesn't understand that you can't shake a tin cup on your street corners. You need English trash, if you want to stand on their street corners.