My 1st Review....

[MC-Stories]

New Kleo-Ki
Status: chapter 1
May 20, 2026


I gave this a shot because I like Monster girls, and slime girls are really my thing. So I was caught by the hook and got interested in the work. I thought, this story is exactly my thing. However, despite me desperately wanting to like it, I have never read such a bad story. I finished the entire 14 chapters in less than 10 minutes.
Things I liked: Cover is nice. The premise is interesting. Good combination of genres.
Things I didn't like: Everything else
Grammar & Writing: 1/5
English is my fourth language, but even I can see the laziness and countless mistakes in this story. The author is not aware of basic rules and does not even qualify to write anything. No effort or care was put into editing! The writing is on a 3rd-grade level. I am not joking, it's really that basic.
Plot 1/5: Only tell, never show. It’s the red thread running through the story.
Style 1/5: It's not even a story, it's a summary.
I really can't tell you how disappointed I am. I kept reading because I thought it would get better, but I see no improvement. The chapters are always only 500 words and they cover an entire event. It's like reading a short summary of a story. You somehow get what is happening, but you won't enjoy what you're reading. It's like asking AI to summarize a book in the words of a child and then adding a generous amount of mistakes into that summary.
I have never seen such a lazy story. There is no love, there is no care. I was very disappointed and can't recommend this to anyone.

Well, i feel like shit.....

I'm going to be honest with you guys, this is kinda soul crushing, but i won't go down easy!
I'll keep writing until i get it right one day!

But i will address this, i do work hard on crafting my stories, and it's thanks to guys that i even got this far!

 

[Eldoria]

A review's points are more important than its rating. Don't think of it as trolling, think of it as tough love.

A mother scolds her child not out of hatred but out of love, not wanting her child to go astray. A reader harshly criticizes an author not out of hatred but because she/he wants the author to grow and improve her/his narrative skills.

 

[MFontana]

New Kleo-Ki
Status: chapter 1
May 20, 2026


I gave this a shot because I like Monster girls, and slime girls are really my thing. So I was caught by the hook and got interested in the work. I thought, this story is exactly my thing. However, despite me desperately wanting to like it, I have never read such a bad story. I finished the entire 14 chapters in less than 10 minutes.
Things I liked: Cover is nice. The premise is interesting. Good combination of genres.
Things I didn't like: Everything else
Grammar & Writing: 1/5
English is my fourth language, but even I can see the laziness and countless mistakes in this story. The author is not aware of basic rules and does not even qualify to write anything. No effort or care was put into editing! The writing is on a 3rd-grade level. I am not joking, it's really that basic.
Plot 1/5: Only tell, never show. It’s the red thread running through the story.
Style 1/5: It's not even a story, it's a summary.
I really can't tell you how disappointed I am. I kept reading because I thought it would get better, but I see no improvement. The chapters are always only 500 words and they cover an entire event. It's like reading a short summary of a story. You somehow get what is happening, but you won't enjoy what you're reading. It's like asking AI to summarize a book in the words of a child and then adding a generous amount of mistakes into that summary.
I have never seen such a lazy story. There is no love, there is no care. I was very disappointed and can't recommend this to anyone.

Well, i feel like shit.....

I'm going to be honest with you guys, this is kinda soul crushing, but i won't go down easy!
I'll keep writing until i get it right one day!

But i will address this, i do work hard on crafting my stories, and it's thanks to guys that i even got this far!

Don't let it get you down.

The chapters are always only 500 words and they cover an entire event.

This bit, for example, is objectively wrong even just skimming the chapters.
Yeah, there are plenty of grammatical errors throughout as well, and your writing skill level is amateurish at best, expecting any different from a new author self-publishing on a platform like this for the first time, however, would be completely unreasonable.

That review, honestly, reads more like an emotionally-driven, opinionated, and unnecessarily vitriolic teardown of not only your piece, but you as an author. Blended with no end of projected expectations and desires for what the story should have been, in their opinion, rather than any kind of worthwhile review or critique that is coming from a place of someone who's personal tastes weren't delivered in your story. There's nothing constructive there to actually build from or take to heart in order to actually improve. It's presented through the lens of "What did I like / not like?" rather than "What were the technical strengths and shortcomings of what was on the page?"

Even just skimming through the available chapters, I could see the care, and intent you put into the characters, and the effort you put into writing what was there. It's obvious you didn't go through a couple of editing passes before releasing it, and I'd strongly advise doing so with the old chapters, as well as all future chapters. That said, most of the errors were consistent capitalization and small grammatical ones.

In short, the only valid points raised by the review were the ones pointing you towards spending more time editing and reviewing your work before releasing it. Put it through google-doc's spell-check and grammar check for starters. Then give it a re-read yourself while asking yourself "How can I write this better?". Sure, you'll end up spending more time between chapter releases, but you'll also push yourself towards a higher level of literary quality overall.

In short, I'd say the story has potential, and so do you, as an author. You've got plenty of room for improvement yet as well, so don't give up. Keep pushing through the noise. Keep honing your craft, and tell the story YOU want to tell.

 

[MC-Stories]

Thanks guys, i feel a little better, this still hurt like hell thought..

 

[Bimbanana]

Thanks guys, i feel a little better, this still hurt like hell thought..

You know that thing about muscle getting stronger after being broken? same thing happen with storytelling

 

[MFontana]

Thanks guys, i feel a little better, this still hurt like hell thought..

I'd also like to point out this particular comment they left.

I finished the entire 14 chapters in less than 10 minutes.

Even without crunching numbers over-much, that's less than one minute for reading each chapter. That kind of reading speed is unrealistic for anyone actively engaging with the fiction, especially someone intent on reviewing it.
What that basically says is "I skimmed this and didn't actually read or engage with the story at all, but I'm going to call it 'reading' so I can bash the author and story for not giving me what I want."

Them having a disabled profile and no avatar at all really doesn't help their credibility either.

 

[Sylver]

I gave this a shot because I like Monster girls

Gasp!

However, despite me desperately wanting to like it, I have never read such a bad story

Ah. Wow. Tough love
It will hurt, not gunna sugar coat it for you. But we take the bad to improve and learn from it. We don't start as winners, we build up overtime.
And hey, silver lining! You got a review with honest criticism that you can use to work on your story! remember, you only fail when you decide!

"I've missed more than 9,000 shots in my career. I've lost almost 300 games. Twenty-six times, I've been trusted to take the game-winning shot and missed. I've failed over and over and over again in my life. And that is why I succeed."
- Michael Jordan

 

[MC-Stories]

Gasp!


Ah. Wow. Tough love
It will hurt, not gunna sugar coat it for you. But we take the bad to improve and learn from it. We don't start as winners, we build up overtime.
And hey, silver lining! You got a review with honest criticism that you can use to work on your story! remember, you only fail when you decide!

"I've missed more than 9,000 shots in my career. I've lost almost 300 games. Twenty-six times, I've been trusted to take the game-winning shot and missed. I've failed over and over and over again in my life. And that is why I succeed."
- Michael Jordan

(smiles warmly, picks up pen and tries again!)

 

[melchi]

Could probably fix most of the first point with a grammar checker