ADHD feedback for your chapters

[AliceMoonvale]

Thank you for reading. I mean i was talking about prose quality, I believe in my story.

No problem!

And that's fine, though you said you wanted to know if the plot and hook were alright, so that's what I focused on.

In terms of the prose itself, you already eluded it was dogwater, and I said it was a hard read because of the overwritten prose and repetition.
Therefore, quality is not the best. Sorry if that didn't come across well enough.

 

[TheKillingAlice]

THANK THA LOOOORD FOR CURING MY HEMMOROIDS!

Jesus wept.

 

[AliceMoonvale]

Jesus wept.

Jesus gave him a prostate exam free of charge.