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    I wrote a identity confusion chapter?

    As the title suggests, I wrote a chapter with identity confusion, and I want to know if it was conveyed. And your thoughts about the narrative.
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    New author seeking feedback and advice

    You can remove the quotes from the chapter title. It will look better again, only if not intentional.
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    New author seeking feedback and advice

    Hey just a heads-up, your each chapter name is in different format(unless intentional).
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    Targeted Story Feedback Thread (READ THE NOTE)

    Hail Arch devil, I require a champion to review my slaves(Mc and co) in my recent chapters(i.e., chapter 6,7) from my grimoire, and whoever is strong enough to do it will be exalted by the Arch duke, and an Infernal engine will be installed in your chest. Name: B*stard of Abaddon. (no romance)...
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    Do you ever ‘cast’ your characters?

    Fine choice of words.
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    Rewriting Challenge

    I prefer this one because it is slightly closer to my context. @Makimaam, so ig you are no.1 and @BeezussWrites is no.2?
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    Meet Aegis the gambling addict.

    Unfortunately, I had to stay at college(tablet and pen is at home) this week, maybe you'll get to see it on the 19th? I am surprised you commented. I will definitely complete it.
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    Got my first one star reviews kinda hurts.

    This is getting interesting :blob_cookie:
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    Can I get a review?

    Welcome froren.
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    Need review?

    Hey, thank you so much for reading. 😁 And yeah this is my most recent one, the one which I have written after revisiting my favorite novels. I am starting to see the gaps which can instantly make this better. I will definitely, follow your advice about avoiding longer sentences with multiple verbs.
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    Writing Prose quality check?

    No, you didn't sound hostile; it just felt like my responsibility as a person asking for a review to provide everything beforehand.
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    Hello, I am still improving as a writer, but I finally managed to post my first original novel

    Absolute satisfaction.✋🤚
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    Need review?

    Yes, I messed up then; I didn't mention he was standing in front of the fence. I thought the info in the last chapter carried over to this one. Ig not. Apart from that, what is your opinion on the whole narrative?
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    Need review?

    limited third, only his thoughts and what he knows is explained. But i believe i slipped into omniscient third in few places?
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    Writing Prose quality check?

    Definitely, because I think straightforward prose suits my world better. And you are right, I need to work on my white spaces issues. Thanks, but the scene was cut off before something else portraying the tension which is not supposed to be there. It was my bad, I messed up by not including...
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    Need review?

    As many writers pointed out, I realised prose meant the whole chapter with context and imagery, which pulls the reader into the world. So i tried my best and completed the chapter with as much description i can provide dynamically.
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    Writing Prose quality check?

    For that i might have to tag the previous chapter . but in short this arena is in a sewer system junction? Idk what it is called but kind of like a area where different tunnels meet and pour water into a hole. Above the chasm there is a metal floor with hooks suspended, and chains as railings...
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    Writing Prose quality check?

    So you mean the scenes connecting this scene or the chapter that has this scene are what prose is?
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    Toxic relationships feedback

    I like that? or it like that?
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    Writing Prose quality check?

    I want to improve my prose; as such, I am learning new things and implementing them in my new chapters. I want to know if the prose in this section is good, bad, or downright shit. The metal floor shuddered as Zerra crashed; the cheers that echoed a moment ago now died down. Silence swallowed...
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