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So, I just know this term called 'Foreshadowing', because one of the reader DM me, and mention about this. She said that I dropped several foreshadowing across 20 chapters just to 'make it sense' later. She told me that "Foreshadowing is good, but you should not drag it too long. I must re-read...

Oof, 'close to' Stephen King. That's very high standard dude :sweat_smile::sweat_smile::sweat_smile:

Hymn of the Dark Within the darkness, I crawl as their nightmare The cries of dying souls, a melody of despair Their hopes and prayers shattered, begging to spare Lurker of the light, with no one to share Feasting the eyes of the weak with terror and fear Devouring their blood with...

Oh my God! this is so fucking cool!! The environment details are so good! I'll never made those much details without being given up middle way, hahahahaha

I wonder, why this kind of story have better respond than my previous one :blob_hmm_two: (It's psychological thriller actually)

Oh wow it's very detailed. Too detail actually. For me i prefer something more snappy or compact on the detail. Maybe focus more on something you want to highlight on the details? Because i think the dialogs already do the justice to picture Dree's agony or helplessness. But the writing itself...

Mmm, this is what i understand about the scene : The shadow lunged toward Aegis, a cold prickle of dread crawling under his skin. He collapsed into a tight crouch, burying his head beneath his arms and squeezing his eyes shut as a guttural snarl vibrated through the air directly above him...

I think one of the issue here, you need to separate between the narrative and internal thought. You can use Italic for internal thought, so reader can understand the narrative better. Yes! it's okay! I think your english is good!

When you said, this Lithe is villain, the contrast of his graceful appearance clearly memorable. Only because you said this is villain character. But, I can't imagine him as psychotic character. Maybe instead 'shimmering' you can describe it like 'hollow gaze'. Or perhaps including extra subtle...

I'll conquer the last spot!

I don't know why, but i think it's my personal taste. With black outline, it's killing the mysterious vibe.

MINE!!!

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What's the story about? I read some paragraph.. but i got lost in the middle. Is it about psychological detachment?

Not gonna lie, this Cover is cool as fuck! I like those font choice!

This is real milestone! Congrats dude!