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I think it lacks of flow, if it was high-stake fighting.

I tried both 1k - 2k each chapter for my fantasy writing And 2k - 3k for my dark psychological romance writing (originally it was 4.5k - 5.5k long each chapters) And for some reason it deliver better. Compared my first upload.

As new writer myself, i don't care anymore even no one read my writing, the fact that from writing i manage to get new knowledge about this literature art, get to know new people around here and able to vent my ideas on writing, i'm pretty satisfied. I just finished my first book (ad finem...

For me, is it Tragic? Yes. Heavy? Yes. But is it trigger PTSD and Reality of war? No. First, Reality of war. The scene of Reynald mercilessly kill the gang but not finished the boy is contradicting. It is too cliche even i can guess right away, there'll be revenge later on. Beside, the boy on...

I see, i read your revised writing and Eldoria's suggestion. I'll cited some paragraph from your writing : And made some adjustment on the pacing, like this : Disclaimer : I'm not expert on writing even more at horror. But i think if you made it more punchier and heavy focus on...

The tension suit better for action scene to be honest. And your writing on action scene actually become much more better!

Dang, that's great character's POV subtext. It's very clear and pointed out to the plot subtext. It would be great to see from her mother POV later thou!

Oh shit, what i understand about this, is it some kind of grimdark fantasy? The way she describe the 'Mr.Dog' dancing after her mom feed him, feels... dark. Since the fact that her mom actually poisoned him right? Is it actually a wolf?

You sure?

The last warrior cometh.

I like the way you play with color, you gave darker shades to distinguish 2 figures.

Wow this shit escalated really fast! Anyone need a coke? 4$ each.

I see, is it too dramatic yes? Yes, i know this is not popular genre in here. But since it was my first writing, i'll keep this story posted here as memory. Thank you for the feedback! :blob_highfive:

Indeed! You have great taste!

Ah, i see. Never thought about this. Because i'm still working on my action writing right now, maybe the hints i planted will be buried. :sweat_smile:

Hmm, for now I did release fast, because my aim is to make it completed novel as fast as i can. Here's the truth about my writing, I was just write based on the context for each chapters that I already made for entire book (including the pivot plot points). Then i write each chapters using the...

The subtler hints are like inserted to characters gestures or conversation right? Why would the action one shouldn't be dragged out too much thou? I mean, it can be a hint for something like 'secret villain' right?