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I think it's pretty clear and straight forward. The superheroes are immune to that Typopvirus that originate from Ox Empire. Sadly the MC's mom was infected and now they should wait the scientist to find the cure. You write it very clear and easy to understand.

If you want, you can DM me, i'll try give you my honest opinion regarding it.

Tbh, i don't really get it. What kind of tension you want to seek from those narrative? Excitement? Or Dreadful feeling?

Well, what i mean wasn't that kind of tense scene, more like romantic tension between the characters :sweat_smile: Would you mind telling me it was 'straight' relationship or others?

I can help you with my opinion if either i grasp the tension or not.

Yeah, something like that. Just necessary context thou. So you'll know which point of your story will suitable as a hook. But, i'll admit, i was forget to upload my prologue, so maybe my opinions here kinda 'all talk'. :sweat_smile:

Wow dude, when @Eldoria said your narrative neat that's mean your style is good. Perhaps, try to create story ideas first how it will end and what kind of plot you want to highlight. That way i think you'll find the right hook for your writing. Well, that's just my opinion :blob_popcorn:

Well, I did it actually, well for me, it was sad moment. It was MC's 2 disciples, who actually love each others.

My opinion will be, If the work represent the author's genuine ideas or imagination. If the effort come from stealing or duplicating or adapting others person's fiction, it's not work of art. It's just simply.... a work. Like office worker, they just follow the task, adapting with work's...

Best thing I got was when they rooting for certain characters and they didn't know what will coming next :sweat_smile: :sweat_smile: :sweat_smile:

Hmm, Since I already written all context and plots board for entire books, I don't have any "Worst" character that I regretted. Especially when my writing about Psychological Horror and Grimdark Fantasy. But, if we talk about the characteristic side, mine would be Clarice. She mentioned...

Hi, I need some feedback regarding emotional moment and thrilling ambience. I need to know whether the pace is too fast or is it enough. And either you can captured the atmosphere or not. Name : MENTOR Feedback Capture : Emotional and Atmosphere Capture. Expected Length : 1,3k words (chapter...

I read your latest chapters, well I could tell you want to make it sound more Comics-like story. The dynamic between MC and his butler(?) Xavier quite good. Xavier was clearly overworked and MC quite chaotic, typical teenage boys. But, this is my opinion, I need to read it 3 times to understand...

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Bro, i think it supposed to be translated as : "You're blind" :blob_joy: Ok i might have missed your sarcasm, hahahaha

"I can tell you spend more time taking selfies than you do in front of the mirror."

It reminds me of the debate decades ago about whether it is better to read a novel on an electronic device or in a printed book. The same applies to sketch artists: is it better to sketch on canvas and paper or a digital drawing pad? Traditionalists argue that sketching on a pad ruins the...

I see, then following Eldoria's suggestion will be best for you, strictly using Limited Third POV. Because as you said, the main plot is about AIKO's journey on your world, right? with that you can deliver the plot of your story more clearly.