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Kill them.

Are you seriously shading and coloring using mouse and keyboard? :blob_shock::blob_shock::blob_shock::blob_shock:

Goddamn! Why you don't draw directly from draw pad bro?

For some reason, your writing here feels like a First POV forced to Third POV narrative. Like Eldoria and BernKatstel suggest, for third POV narrative the environment feels lacking. But, I'll not talk about technical stuff. The fighting scene is quite good, but it seems you miss some detail in...

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Yeah i understand that actually, since my first novel using the pet name "Tiger" that trigger emotional tension toward the MC. Again this is just suggestion, perhaps just using certain gesture (How he look at her or how he smirk toward her) might work. OR if you want to highlight those pet...

Dude, are you really a beginner? This kind of spatial posing is hard to sketch!

It's nice to found Dark Romance pop up here actually. I'll not talk about technical stuff, but I think you don't have to posted content warning all over the chapters. And use for your author note. As for the story, for me, when Damien said "Hello, little kitten", it kinda break the tension. I...

This one good insight, i never thought about this.

Damn, you got mad skill mate.

Mine will be Russian-British.

To be honest I was impressed by how well you write this story based on chapter 1. For me the pace is perfect, and you narrate Sophia's POV really well. I could picturing the ambience and Sophia's thoughts perfectly. There's a little hiccup after this line : "She thought back while watching...

Yeah! My first draft actually doing that, but whenever I re-read again I couldn't feel the emotional tension, and ended up make it to 4 chapters :sweat_smile: And yeah, since I already weaving too deep all the breadcrumbs all across the chapters, for now, I might keep the current plot pace.

Yeah, i get what you mean. To be honest, I wanted to share the whole memory logs from chapter 22 until 25, to picture what truly happen. But, it might a lot of work to read whole 7k words :sweat_smile: So I just want to know, what kind of raw emotions the reader will get if they simply read 1...

Betrayal and Regret to be precise.

Ah yes, that was intended actually. May I know, is it hard to visualize the action scene or the emotions too? Thank you so much for noticing my choice of words! I absolutely try to minimize the accent and implemented standard Web Novel words. hahahaha :blobrofl: And it's true, I tried fast...

Hi, I need your opinion about this emotional scene I made. Can you capture the emotion? Or is it too flat? Or maybe it's too fast? The context : Zarev was being tricked by his sister, Clarice. From chapter before, he asked Clarice to deliver Ramond to his biological father. But he found out...

you need to wait, it's under review friend.

Oh, it was the same guy who DM me few days ago. I didn't accept it thou, since I was too lazy set up that kind of stuff :sweat_smile: :sweat_smile: