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I honestly thought, after 40 thousand years, I had found the one. Everything seemed so perfect. And then the Isekai gods send Truck-Kun to take her to a new universe the very day I proposed. Ah well, time to mop up the mess they left behind and find another The One. Back to Tinder I go.

Man - dad used to be a mall Santa for about three years (even did Easter Bunny one year, but swore "Never Again" on that one). Never thought to ask him if there was a name for it, but I think the people setting it up called it a "stage"

I used to rely on one ... but my handwriting is so bad (and getting worse by the year it seems) that it is pretty much useless except for random notes now.

Had a friend once make a character called Street Fighter. He was essentially living asphalt with a lot of maneuvers and powers named after driving instructions and road conditions...

Wow. And I thought having 57 chapters written in one story was "not too bad"...

A highly caffeinated, yellow soda beverage, also called Mountain Dew and a few other, similar names.

Some friends of mine once rented an anime film that turned out to be hentai... and had 1000 penii attacking Tokyo or something like that (in the past, every time I even mention it, at least one person in the room knows the title, but I don't)

This is weird. First I clicked on the image for this story and your other one popped up. I came back, and now I see a broken image link for this one, but if I click on the "broken graphic" it goes to the right place.

It honestly depends on how attached I am to the characters, and how it is written. Showing the afterlife would kind of cheapen it for me, though, as it shows she really has an immortal soul, so the sacrifice meant nothing. In general, I prefer them if there is a "next part" likely, where we'll...

Ditto. Have had white sauce pizzas, seafood pizzas (shrimp or squid), and some other weird stuff (one of my favorite combos is pineapple, jalepeno and ham), but this one seems too far out for me... but I also dislike onions and a few other "regular" topping so, eh. Sounds like the same kind...

Crappy crap. Only read the good, high-quality crap! It's Craptastic!

Ah, yeah, I can see where that would be awkward. As non-fiction about a real athlete, it would make sense (and still be a bit infuriariating but at least make sense) but in fiction, either there would need to be some build-up, where he starts rejecting his training and such, or ... well, just...

That could also be. Or maybe they were waffling between the terms and struck on a third one that was completely wrong. I know I did that a few times when I was just getting started writing.

So, wait was that fiction or non-fiction? Things like that sometimes happen - a person who seems completely fit can just die from having something new introduced to their system. Usually, it means there was an underlying condition (in cases of athlete deaths like this, usually exhaustion from...

Nice - you're ahead of me by $4.85...

Okay, finished this. Have a slight suspicion I see where this is going but not sure... Should use a semicolon (;) or dash (-) here to denote change of thought. According to my grammar checkers, you make a mistake I make a lot - there should PROBABLY (sometimes I disagree but...) be a comma...

Suspect they meant Anonymous or something like that instead of Androgynous.

Don't have time to go through the whole thing but the first paragraph has a mixing of past and present tense that kind of works but may be incorrect. I would suggest re-wording the part abut the glasses so that the word "thick" does not appear twice in a row - at least "inch thick" thick...

It does kind of look like the elf-kid is standing with one foot on the bike rack and someone forgot to install a seat... As for the chapter, it is kind of cool to see a folklore/mythology that is not either completely made-up for the story, or based on one of the Big Five (Slavic, Japanese...

Definitely better. Says what needs to be said, doesn't ramble a lot, and provides a nice teaser in that last quote. Most of my synopses have gone through at least three mental revisions and two in print before I posted them, BTW.