It is not rng. People that say it are coping. See what gets popular and check if your work has any of those things. If not, then you will struggle. 500 readers is rising author. 1k readers is well-known author. 2k readers is famous author.
All of this circumstantial evidence. They say that proof is in the pudding, but this pink pudding had proof planted by Pangmida. Do I taste a hint of strawberry? You are fruity yourself.
In watching a video about Demon's Souls original being better than the remake, the person said something that made me think of fanfic writers. He said, "I believe that a remake should be true to the spirit of the original. That it should be approached with humility..."
And it made me realize...
I am my own worst enemy. I get in my way a lot with writing, and I am harder on myself and writing quality than anyone can ever be. I have a dutiful mindset that can hold me back or stop me from writing. What's been really helpful for me is setting deadlines and meeting them. No matter how much...
All of my feedback is biased and to be taken as the opinions of an amateur author.
Overall: Tense swapping, too much prescriptive text and boring text, and way too much dialogue.
The Good:
The grammar is okay. It's readable even with tense swapping, and you seem to have the beginnings of...