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First person in my bloodline to read that sentence.

I haven't read a lot of josei, drama or romance but my thoughts: 1. I am interested in reading it. 2. Depends on what will be getting the most focus, i.e I was more interested in the apple and whether the other people will wait rather than if Lune could protect his kingdom and his relationship...

Thank you Eldoria, I appreciate your feedback! I'll focus on removing the choppy feel of the scene first... emotions are daunting.

I have to admit what you said makes sense but I'm having trouble wrapping my head around it. I'm just breaking down my thoughts. So his curiousity was aimed at four things: Why Nura is here with Rak, Rak's arm and the monster in the forest, the three weeks. All of those could be asked in a...

Thanks for your feedback! My train of thought on those narrator's voices were to try and showcase Aren's thoughts/feeling according to Swain's MRU's. And sometimes the other characters. Edit: Do you think it'd be better if it was written in the active form? Like... Three weeks passed and they...

I haven't read alot of the farmer oriented litrpg's but it does seem cliche, which isn't exactly wrong and caters to the people looking for more of that subgenre. I honestly don't know what to change, because it literally tickles all the boxes for your audience. Maybe specify more about the...

Hi, I'm looking for feedback on my latest chapter. Not on the plot/characters but more on the text itself, pacing (Scene-Summary) and if you could imagine the story world. It's 1k words. Thank you!

Winning currently am I.

Playing devil advocates here but LLM can be a solution to some of those problems. Maybe not the ones currently in use but definitely in the future. So hopefully it comes full circle.

People would read anything if its piques their interest. And the easiest way to peak their interest in isekai is by putting them in this other world. It's basically the principal of "Bring on the bear." On the other hand, I don't think delaying the isekai by 4 chapters will make your book DOA...

Academic institutions use a different and more capable detector but even that is not consistently accurate. The ones you can use freely online are simply unreliable at best.

Reddit post with some of the exercises. It's missing examples though which is vital.

By adding in longer and more varied sentences you improve the staccato feel when you do use it. It's the same for the overuse of any technique.

Learning literary english isn't something that "Can't be done." It does take alot of time and effort for someone to become proficient in it and there's no way to get better quickly. What english books do you read because that's one of the most reliable way to improve story telling and writing...

That depends on who the author is because space marines get absolutely diffed in some stories.

How would you manage a story going past 300 chapters with tens of important characters and dozens of arcs. Sure your one chapter of notes can cover it but eventually it's going to be overwhelmed and you're going to create another chapter, then another. Eventually you're going to end up with a...

Before anything else, writing is hard and personal so its commendable that you put yourself out there. But like Makimaam said, you're lacking the most important thing which is a hook. You added cues to villainize and build empathy for Alexander, and which way you lead to doesn't matter, but his...

Why would you not want to make your life easier?

My question to you is why would it be an info dump? Even in ww2 there were many fronts and it was split into 1v1 to 3v3's. Is your protagonist going to be in all the fronts? Why is the war happening? Also it's probably going to take a lot of chapters so I don't think they're going to be...

He'd use the silver rattle one of his triplets love. It'd prob make a good makeshift bat I think