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If you think your MC will not get involved actively, have other characters act and push them into the center of conflict. Maybe said characters mistake them for some being from an opposing faction and so try to kill them. Maybe they learn of the MC's strength, and try to persuade them to get on...

I agree. Dialogue tag gets a comma, other actions can get either a comma or period.

I used to be Pride and Greed. Tis was pretty bad. But I got over it. Now I'm just depressing Sloth. And chastity, maybe? Virginity is overrated.

Oh, love. I've fallen for you, Tempokai, and your sweet, lyrical criticism. ...And to all the losers out there, this is how to get a girl.

I wonder if you edited this post before putting it up. If you didn't, and this is what your first drafts look like, I should just quit writing, lmao. If you did edit multiple times before posting, thanks for using so much of your time.

Not offering my work, (don't read it yet, lol), I just wanna say your reviews are sooo fun. I'm reading through them while gasping at the metaphors and the drama and the kinda sing-songy prose? I'm unsure how to describe it, but it is awesome. And I can also apply your criticism to look back on...

Your chapters feel short. I checked, and they are around 500 words each. There are some readers who don't read novels with chapters fewer than 1k words, so I suggest you combine two or three chapters into one. And beware of repetition. It turns cool edgy into cringe. You use a lot of short...

As a big lover of slice of life, (I'm obsessed with the genre, tbh) it is very possible to write an interesting synopsis. Just tell readers what to expect. Erase the sentences telling us the background stuff and the family settings, and tell us what the story is about. Dude who moves to another...

Ooh! I love elves, and I love edgy OP protagonists. As long as they're unique and fun instead of boring and cringe, that is. There is a fine line, lol. Your novel is walking a tightrope on that line, so I'm unsure how I feel about the prose cuz of it. All the sentences are short and dramatic...

...Okay, this is a bigger problem, then. Your readers have the wrong expectations. If school is a small part, if it isn't the majority or the genre of the novel, then you should not mark the novel 'School Life' genre. Same with romance. Instead, replace with tags, like the 'Romantic Subplot'...

Yeah, I already saw this novel before. But looking at the synopsis, it looks like there was progress. At least now it tells me it's going to be a school life fic. Or so I assume. That's what the synopsis tells me, anyway. I have the same advice as before; break up bigger paragraphs, and...

I tried again. Assuming it's a problem with the embedding, I deleted all previous data, and just sent in the chapters I wrote as text instead of a file. It forgot everything I wrote and again started making stuff up. But I think it was better than last time. When I gave it the files and not...

Thank you so much! That explains things. It was turned on, I turned it off, and I also realized the 'using data as a training tool' option was turned on. Damn it. And now I'm scared ChatGPT will start spouting lines from my novels in the future, but at least it was only five chapters. Not sixty...