LuoirM

LuoirM

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  • LuoirM
    Is this the correct use of the —? I don't know what it's called but people told me it's used like this.

    I walked out to see — A man with blue skin with strange face tattoos, another tall man with light skin with no ears, and a human woman in all black except for her big wizard-like hat — they were all talking about something something dungeon.
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    This is what I'd do.

    I walked outside and I saw them — a man with blue skin with strange face tattoos, another tall man with light skin with no ears, and a human woman in all black except for her big wizard-like hat. They were talking about something something dungeon.
    LuoirM
    LuoirM
    Thanks dads and moms :blobtaco:
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    @LuoirM Sorta. This is more of a stylistic choice, but how you use them apparently tells a lot about the author. For example, I could also rewrite them as:

    I. On the day of my middle school opening ceremony, back when I was still ashamed of my mother, she had been extra fussy with my hair(...)
    II. That was what she was: a liar.

    Use them sparingly, in my opinion.
    LuoirM
    I got a recipe for a late night high-on-weed-with-the-homies drinks from the lyrics of a music video (Khấn Còi by G.Family if you're curious)

    "Scotch và Sprite là 3/2 và pha đá" which translated to "3 part scotch, 2 part sprite, mix it with ice"

    Anyone gonna try this? I'm not allowed near wine
    LuoirM
    A slight jab of how often I've seen fantasy media just randomly throw in explainations for the audience without anyone asking:

    "I've just demonstrated her power to her, so I twisted my energy to prepare a fire spell before using the essences around her to cast it."

    "Why are you speaking like you're explaining magic to some audience?"
    LuoirM
    On one hand, I would like to be a random soul in the ever floating world that focused on its goal to the end of the journey where he'll sleep daily next to heaven, alone, romantically staring at the night sky

    On the other hand, I miss her and I kinda want the validation she gave me once again..
    LuoirM
    My story got a lot of traffic, as in views, readers, favorites, etc. But never, ever, nada, basically 0 comments. Does this mean my story's not on the comedic side?
    LuoirM
    I would either leave town covered in bruises or covered in handprints, and my fate was not in my control, in my will no more. Maybe, just maybe, it is like what I've once read of Michel de Montaigne: “In a great storm, sailors in ancient times invoked Neptune: O God! You will save or destroy me according to your will. But whatever you will, I will steer my ship as necessary!”
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    LuoirM
    LuoirM
    Ohio.

    Florida would be more of Hải Phòng or sumin.
    Rhaps
    Rhaps
    Hải Phong is more like Detroit imo.
    And you're correct, your place is definitely more Ohio.
    LuoirM
    LuoirM
    Florida is just on some different fucking spectrum I ain't able to compare.

    But, wild people with wild pets, probably somewhere in Tây Nguyên or Bắc Trung Bộ ig
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    LuoirM
    Expectation: I didn't post anything after 3 days of trying
    Reality: I wrote 3000 words, it's just that the chapter's long, don't put yeself down.
    LuoirM
    There could be people I know in that crowd, people I've interacted with, people I've slept with. The thought alone humiliate a fragile-by-time soul like mine enough, the air was getting thicker, the voices were getting louder and my mind were getting filled with animated tangled strings.
    LuoirM
    Suggestion needed:
    Sound for continuous slapping, a woman bitchslapping another woman, but it goes on for a long time so it shouldn't sound too weird, should I use "tap" "slap" "bap" "chad"?
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    LuoirM
    LuoirM
    Tonight pls daddy
    RepresentingWrath
    RepresentingWrath
    I'm on it.
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    I don't think using onomatopoeia is a good idea. And even if you do use it, try something unique and perhaps make an analogy or metaphor to describe. Whatever you'd think would work better.
    LuoirM
    It was one of the happiest moment since I'm into town, even though everything leading up to that was insignificant for me to feel like that. And I should have guess that I was, just, a little, too happy, as I the moment went into hell.

    The door to the room slam open.
    LuoirM
    I fell down to my knees, accepting fate, accepting the fact that my legs were walking on its own towards an unnamed destiny.

    Maybe, just maybe, it is like what I've once read of Michel de Montaigne: “In a great storm, sailors in ancient times invoked Neptune: O God! You will save or destroy me according to your will. But whatever you will, I will steer my ship as necessary!”
    LuoirM
    Electricity went out, spent 20.000VNĐ for 3 hours to go to an internet cafe to write here, and holy shit they have the biggest monitor I've ever seen, liek triple the size of the laptop I've bene writing on
    LuoirM
    One of the stranger sentences I've wrote:
    "As the tide weakened with the grip of the feline's man"
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    Tsuru
    Tsuru
    As the tide weakened = The tide weaken with something else
    with the grip = so it weaken at same time as the grip of someone ?
    of the feling = a cat
    's man = the "male" of the cat?

    The tide of "something", weaken, while the grip of a male (cat) husband of a cat.
    LuoirM
    LuoirM
    The catboy grips and the tide of the water slow down
    Tsuru
    Tsuru
    A very very old golden sentence from a famous mangaka

    "A cat is fine too"
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