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What about misunderstanding? Cid is the best

Writing comedy in prose can be tricky—but it’s also incredibly rewarding when done right. Here’s a breakdown of some techniques I used...

Eldoria, I'm sorry. I have to bully you a little bit. I find it hilarious you made this inspirational-advice post, clearly in reference...

Well, maybe my judgment is biased this time. I already suspected the diary style was 'probably' intentional. But when I remember the...

I appreciate the feedback, but my review of your review is that you are giving me advice on how to write a normal story, an immersive...

Actually enjoyed it. Pretty unique style with the diary entries. The only thing that's hard to accept is that you only get told a tiny...

I try.

Hey, I’m really glad my feedback helped — and congrats on writing all of this in such a short time. Five hours for a first draft is...

Don't treat your world as a static object that's observed. Make it alive, like an organism, interacting with your characters. Let the...

This is a very solid start. The pacing is good, the imagery is clear, and the voice feels natural. You have a strong sense of scene and...

Looks at my own, purposefully written diary-style novel :blob_shock:

Okay, after reading six chapters in one sitting without rereading—purely to measure immersion as a casual reader—I’m fairly confident...

Thank you for your detailed feedback. I will definitely incorporate some of your suggestions, particularly those concerning logic and...

It is when the perspective you are read shifts mid scene. I think of it as just a technique that when poorly executed can be quite...

The two can and often do overlap. Honestly any time someone shifts perspective within a scene, at least without some kind of obvious...