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This is good. If you haven't seen those series, then let's touch on an older franchise like... okay, Star Wars? First arc: getting the... -
That... that took me a few rereads to grasp who was chasing what. :blob_dizzy: We're lacking a lot here, but something crucial would...
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Eldoria reacted to L1aei's post in the thread Competitive straightforward biased blunt reviewer here with
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It's a 5.5 overall? I don't suppose you could simplify the reasons based on each subtracted point? If not, it's cool; not my novel. -
Eldoria reacted to Nolff's post in the thread Competitive straightforward biased blunt reviewer here with Like.
Might need some polishing on the grammar. Reading your chaps while trying to imagine the scene playing in my mind is a difficult task...
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Eldoria reacted to L1aei's post in the thread Need help regarding dark and sensitive themes. with Like.
Yeah, I got a fourteen year old kid to feed too.
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Eldoria reacted to Omarfaruq's post in the thread Need help regarding dark and sensitive themes. with Haha.
Bro, are you suspecting that link is malicious?
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Eldoria reacted to L1aei's post in the thread Need help regarding dark and sensitive themes. with Like.
First off? You weren't lying about the intent. Yeesh, this isn't edge for edge's sake here. You got a through-line of fear that's got...
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Eldoria reacted to Nolff's post in the thread Need help regarding dark and sensitive themes. with Like.
Grammer My guy, if you really need a feedback so bad, head to my blunt feedback thread. Gonna make one just for you, and also other...
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Eldoria reacted to Conqueror_Quack's post in the thread Need help regarding dark and sensitive themes. with Like.
You can get banned for this, it's against the forum rules.
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Eldoria replied to the thread 1st chapter bullet points.Dude, I don't understand why you wrote a prologue like this? The beginning of this prologue feels like a random character report. The...
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Eldoria reacted to SenseiHusky's post in the thread Competitive straightforward biased blunt reviewer here with Like.
Ok diss me Arc 4: The rise of Tenzing. Teaser A single dark drop of blood falls onto a floor filled with corpses. Meanwhile, a group...
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Eldoria reacted to Nolff's post in the thread Competitive straightforward biased blunt reviewer here with Like.
I think he's just not figuring out how to do so, yet. It's more like someone so green and tries to write a fic for the first time.
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Eldoria replied to the thread Competitive straightforward biased blunt reviewer here.I didn't expect this abrupt transition pattern to be used here. I've reviewed fiction that uses such abrupt transitions. Is the author...
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Eldoria reacted to Nolff's post in the thread Competitive straightforward biased blunt reviewer here with Wow.
Yes I am, Now, wait. @SenseiHusky Are you telling me to read this not in google doc's form? Hope you write more, cuz I'd like to learn...
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Eldoria replied to the thread Rate this teaser/sneak peak of my most violent book.Dude, you're so obsessed with ratings. Trust me! Ratings won't help improve your narrative. Those just please you or disappoint you...