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The fight itself was excellent. I don't know if this is proper advice or just some stupid thing only I am doing, but the damage seems...

There have been several times where I caught myself overusing the word several, often appearing several times in one paragraph, across...

It's no trouble, El. Really. I've got about four hours to kill in the morning, so reading and critiquing for you is a fine way to spend...

Overuse and repetition words are likely due to a lack of vocabulary and a lack of editing. Web novels are rarely professionally edited...

If you're writing fantasy and a reader complained about realism, you know that reader can't read.

Not impossible. I used to be defensive tackle in football for years, even had a radioactive orange mouthguard in my mouth that used to...

You will find his feedback constructive. This is because him and M.G Driver is the same being.

Well, some of the details of the scenes may seem strange (what kind of crazy person would preach while fighting brutally in real life?)...

Um... did I mention how to monologue while fighting? :blob_hide:

I appreciate your attention. I probably don't want to be too much of a bother here. So, I'll ask for a one-time read for ease of...

I only have the time for a quick skim right now, so I'll refrain from offering a rating and full critique and analysis until I have the...

Being unapologetically myself, and delivering that same tone in my stories, through my characters. (I consider this a strength, but I'm...

Most users just ask for feedback and don't bother saying what kind of feedback they need. The worse kind don't even put the scene or the...

I think your motivation and expressive effort in writing hand-to-hand combat scenes are excellent. By paying attention to the points...

Lecture... please tell me you don't visualize your written material as a lecture? I didn't or else I would've dozed off. :blob_sleep: