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No problem... you just answer the scale option 1 for hard to imagine. An honest answer is the answer I'm looking for. This is...

No worries... but... if I, or one of your readers, can't read it easily, how would you expect an honest assessment of the scene?

Currently I still want to analyze the visualization aspect of the scene because no matter how good the plot and characters in a...

Well, I appreciate your feedback. But again... this feedback focuses on the visual aspect of the battle scenes—how they can be...

I am the opposite of A-Random-Writer. I made it about 1/2 the way through and lost the thread. The fight might make sense, but the...

Paragraphing needs work. For max clarity each character gets its own paragraph. Both of these are Clara. Combine. First noun is...

I feel like including where Clara's and Erna's gazes were focused on would've helped. Before they lunged forward, I was envisioning them...

I am not qualified enough to give a rating because I read and write Asian novels. Western novels fight scenes work differently. In Asian...

Thank you for your feedback. The title of this fiction is Blood Rose Princess. You can check it in my signature.

I don't usually like stories with "mana" and special abilities, but this one was actually pretty interesting. What's the full name of...

This is how you ask for feedback. You ask what aspects from your story needing them. Summoning our fight scenes experts and...

Feedback on Fight Scene Visualization Can you rate how visual the fight scenes in the following a chapter are in your mind as a reader...

Were you not worthy? Or were you too worthy?

Don't apologize; I just saw a chance to imply that OP was bald too and I took it.

Once again, I am not part of the question, nor the answer. This time, it may be for the best.