Seeking Feedback for a New Isekai/Otome Story [Koko, Akuyaku Reijou ga Oosuginai?!]

[Meran_Coris]

Hello everyone! I hope you're all having a wonderful day. ₍^. .^₎⟆

It's been a while since I've posted on Scribble Hub, but I'm back with a new story and I would be so grateful for your feedback.

The title is [Koko, Akuyaku Reijou ga Oosuginai?! ~Otome Gēmu no you na Sekai ni Tensei shita kedo, Tada Tanoshiku Ikitai dake~] or [Aren't There Too Many Villainesses Here?! Reincarnated Into an Otome Game-like World, but I Just Want to Enjoy My Life!], and it's an isekai with otome and villainess elements. I'm open to any and all feedback, whether it's critiques, suggestions, or your first impressions on things like:

• Prose and writing style
• The Character
• Pacing and plot
• Anything else that comes to mind!

You can read all of the released chapters or even just a few—any feedback is appreciated. You might want to read carefully... sometimes you can notice something hiding in the details. ( ദ്ദി ˙ᗜ˙ )

You can read the story here: Koko, Akuyaku Reijou ga Oosuginai?! ~Otome Gēmu no you na Sekai ni Tensei shita kedo, Tada Tanoshiku Ikitai dake~

Thank you so much in advance for your time! I'm really looking forward to hearing what you think.

 

[Eldoria]

Your story's genre is ambiguous. You've included various genres, including action, adventure, comedy, fantasy, harem, isekai, martial arts, and romance. At first glance, these genres seem friendly to general readers.

However, everything changes when you include a 'Content Warning' for sexual content. I'm confused and doubtful. Is this a mainstream Japanese-style LN story, or is it smut disguised as fantasy?

If you want to focus your story on sexual content, you should have included an R18 genre like mature, adult, or smut. And if you only want to focus on fantasy in an LN style that's friendly to general readers, you should have omitted the warning for sexual content. These are just minor complaints on my part.

Critical Note: I'm a fan of Japanese-style LN stories and used to review LN and WN on NU. But I'm not interested in the R18 genre. That's what makes me hesitant to include your novel on my reading list.

 

[Meran_Coris]

Your story's genre is ambiguous. You've included various genres, including action, adventure, comedy, fantasy, harem, isekai, martial arts, and romance. At first glance, these genres seem friendly to general readers.

However, everything changes when you include a 'Content Warning' for sexual content. I'm confused and doubtful. Is this a mainstream Japanese-style LN story, or is it smut disguised as fantasy?

If you want to focus your story on sexual content, you should have included an R18 genre like mature, adult, or smut. And if you only want to focus on fantasy in an LN style that's friendly to general readers, you should have omitted the warning for sexual content. These are just minor complaints on my part.

Critical Note: I'm a fan of Japanese-style LN stories and used to review LN and WN on NU. But I'm not interested in the R18 genre. That's what makes me hesitant to include your novel on my reading list.

Thank you for your honest feedback, Eldoria-san! I'm so glad you brought this up.

I believe I made a mistake with that tag. I was thinking of some light ecchi in the future, not R18 content, and I wasn't sure which tag was most appropriate. The last thing I want to do is mislead readers.

Do you think it would be better if I removed the 'sexual content' warning entirely to avoid this confusion? Your advice would be greatly help me.

 

[Eldoria]

Thank you for your honest feedback, Eldoria-san! I'm so glad you brought this up.

I believe I made a mistake with that tag. I was thinking of some light ecchi/suggestive themes in the future, not R18 content, and I wasn't sure which tag was most appropriate. The last thing I want to do is mislead readers.

Do you think it would be better if I removed the 'sexual content' warning entirely to avoid this confusion? Your advice would be greatly help me.

There's a tag called ecchi. If you don't intend to include R18 scenes in your novel, you can remove the warning that it contains sexual content. Add the ecchi genre to your novel. It's enough and won't fool readers.

 

[Meran_Coris]

There's a tag called ecchi. If you don't intend to include R18 scenes in your novel, you can remove the warning that it contains sexual content. Add the ecchi genre to your novel. It's enough and won't fool readers.

Got it, Thank you, Eldoria-san!
I'll switch over to the "ecchi" tag. I appreciate the help!

 

[Eldoria]

Got it, Thank you, Eldoria-san!
I'll switch over to the "ecchi" tag. I appreciate the help!

I'm glad I could help you. I wish you success with your novel. Best regards.

 

[Meran_Coris]

I'm glad I could help you. I wish you success with your novel. Best regards.

I am very grateful that you noticed that.
I didn't even realize it myself, so let me thank you again. Also, good luck with your novel.