Post your characters, and I'll tell you what I think of them from my reader's perspective.

[Seaspecter]

I still won't say these are flaws, but it does make her more interesting. Can't say I like her, but she isn't as boring as I thought.

Honestly Anna's one of those love her or hate her kind of characters so I get what you mean.

 

[Representing_Tromba]

No offence, but I like him even less now, but don't forget that this is only personal preference.

The thing is, he looks like a general mob(foot ninja?), maybe officer\captain. That's why I said generic, but at the same time, I like this look.

Fair enough.

 

[RepresentingWrath]

Character: Melle

Short, Short Black hair, Dark Brown Eyes, Large Chest

Both of her parents died in a tragic accident while she was in high-school, but she managed to go to college and get a job afterwards. Due to something her mom said while she was little she became obsessed with the idea of sleeping giants. She climbed a mountain after hearing a folktale, but she didn't find a sleeping giant. Instead, she found a vampire who took her to another world. She is relatively easy going, but sometimes there are things that will trigger her trauma. She gets over these traumas by talking to her new vampy gf. Other than that, she is friendly to most and tries to see the good parts of people.

Sorry enby-chan, but I don't like her look. As for everything else, you mostly described her backstory. I can't say anything about her. Her name is cute.

 

[Deleted member 84247]

Sorry enby-chan, but I don't like her look. As for everything else, you mostly described her backstory. I can't say anything about her. Her name is cute.

 

[Corty]

@SailusGebel Understandable. About the flaws; she has multiple but those are part of the story and it is hard to condense down 100+ concurrently running chapters.

 

[Deleted member 76176]

I've not settled on a name yet.

A tiny, plain girl with a dusting of freckles on her face. Wears glasses and has a strange obsession with black.

Although socially awkward and shy, she often displays high emotional intelligence. After encountering the hanged body of her best friend, she hasn't been able to overcome the grief stage without ever mourning. The incident prematurely forced her into adulthood, and as a result, she subsequently enveloped herself in self-harm and other harmful tendencies. Since then, she has rebranded herself.

 

[Story_Marc]

Sure, let's give this a try. I'm actually holding back a lot since I put a lot of work into my characters, particularly with understanding their psychology. I might go a bit over, apologies if it's too much, I'm trying to do this some actual justice.

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Name: Cassidy Cain

Description From The Text for Standard Presentation

She sported clear, creamy skin and a moderate-sized bosom. Long, silky red hair, styled with blunt bangs and sidelocks that cascaded down her shoulders, framed her diamond-shaped face. Her longbow lips were painted a delicate shade of pink that complemented her piercing jade eyes. Her slender nose – long, straight, elegant – perfected the allure of her angelic face.

Like her ally, she boasted a predominantly black suit. However, hers featured a choker necklace, a jacket that harmonized with her crisp white blouse and red tie, a skirt that reached her knees, stockings, and heels. The ensemble melded with her lithe figure like two interlocking puzzle pieces.​

An Image For When More Relaxed & In Private

Personality
Cassidy Cain is a determined, logical, and strategic visionary who leverages her instincts and training to manipulate and predict the actions of others. She maintains a polite detachment in public while showing a more relaxed and playful side to those close to her. She has a preference for diplomacy and trickery above all else, though, amongst her group, she's internally the most aggressive and makes a point of controlling herself. She has a tendency to bottle up her emotions because of this. She tends to repress, displace, and deny as defense mechanisms. Also can be a control freak and a tad too clever for her own good.

While charitable and hardworking as Cassidy Cain, she follows her own approach to noblesse oblige in her Lady Thief alter ego, which she uses to help those that living honestly can't help. She is somewhat cynical beneath the surface, believing that fairness and such don't exist, and so wishes to help those who end up in tight spots that "the truth" can't save. Given the benefits of her position in life, she believes she can more successfully walk the line of morality and get away with things that others might not get away with. Still, she makes a point to avoid crossing said line, given her strong principles. Also, despite the fact she doesn't wish to acknowledge this, a part of her does relish the challenge while also having something of an axe to grind against some of her fellow members in the upper echelon.

Backstory & Motivations
The heiress to the Cain fortune, Cassidy grew up with wealth, fame, and power. To keep her from becoming a spoiled brat and prepare her for her future, she was trained by her grandfather, who instilled in her a sense of ethics that mingled with her innate drive for power. Due to this, she's aware that she did nothing to deserve what she has. Consequently, a part of her is desperate to justify her existence. It's one thing that leads her to try to contribute more to society, in conventional and unconventional ways.

While she is genuine about wanting to help those with less advantages and feels genuine satisfaction from it, these are some of her unconscious secondary motivations: to prove herself and her abilities, to be respected, to convince herself of her own importance, to dominate the environment, to get her way, and above all else, to survive. With survival in mind, not only does Cassidy want to physically survive, she wants a positive legacy that reflects how she views herself. This is also why Cassidy is often visibly annoyed when her pragmatism is criticized as being no different from or better than her targets. She wants to be herself, but she also wishes to be viewed as a good guy for it.

 

[RepresentingWrath]

I've not settled on a name yet.

A tiny, plain girl with a dusting of freckles on her face. Wears glasses and has a strange obsession with black.

Although socially awkward and shy, she often displays high emotional intelligence. After encountering the hanged body of her best friend, she hasn't been able to overcome the grief stage without ever mourning. The incident prematurely forced her into adulthood, and as a result, she subsequently enveloped herself in self-harm and other harmful tendencies. Since then, she has rebranded herself.

I like her appearance. Freckles are nice and relatively rare. As for everything else, you mostly speak about her backstory. Based on this description I don't like her, because there is nothing to like. She is shy, socially awkward, has high EQ, and has harmful tendencies. It's way too little for me to see her as something other than an one-dimensional character.

Sure, let's give this a try. I'm actually holding back a lot since I put a lot of work into my characters, particularly with understanding their psychology. I might go a bit over, apologies if it's too much, I'm trying to do this some actual justice.

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Name: Cassidy Cain

Description From The Text for Standard Presentation


An Image For When More Relaxed & In Private
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Personality
Cassidy Cain is a determined, logical, and strategic visionary who leverages her instincts and training to manipulate and predict the actions of others. She maintains a polite detachment in public while showing a more relaxed and playful side to those close to her. She has a preference for diplomacy and trickery above all else, though, amongst her group, she's internally the most aggressive and makes a point of controlling herself. She has a tendency to bottle up her emotions because of this. She tends to repress, displace, and deny as defense mechanisms. Also can be a control freak and a tad too clever for her own good.

While charitable and hardworking as Cassidy Cain, she follows her own approach to noblesse oblige in her Lady Thief alter ego, which she uses to help those that living honestly can't help. She is somewhat cynical beneath the surface, believing that fairness and such don't exist, and so wishes to help those who end up in tight spots that "the truth" can't save. Given the benefits of her position in life, she believes she can more successfully walk the line of morality and get away with things that others might not get away with. Still, she makes a point to avoid crossing said line, given her strong principles. Also, despite the fact she doesn't wish to acknowledge this, a part of her does relish the challenge while also having something of an axe to grind against some of her fellow members in the upper echelon.

Backstory & Motivations
The heiress to the Cain fortune, Cassidy grew up with wealth, fame, and power. To keep her from becoming a spoiled brat and prepare her for her future, she was trained by her grandfather, who instilled in her a sense of ethics that mingled with her innate drive for power. Due to this, she's aware that she did nothing to deserve what she has. Consequently, a part of her is desperate to justify her existence. It's one thing that leads her to try to contribute more to society, in conventional and unconventional ways.

While she is genuine about wanting to help those with less advantages and feels genuine satisfaction from it, these are some of her unconscious secondary motivations: to prove herself and her abilities, to be respected, to convince herself of her own importance, to dominate the environment, to get her way, and above all else, to survive. With survival in mind, not only does Cassidy want to physically survive, she wants a positive legacy that reflects how she views herself. This is also why Cassidy is often visibly annoyed when her pragmatism is criticized as being no different from or better than her targets. She wants to be herself, but she also wishes to be viewed as a good guy for it.

For some reason, her appearance reminds me of Sunstone chatacters. And I'm not talking about art. Don't know why. Not quite what I enjoy, but I still like her. Personality and backstory, don't like. What I see is a combination of Batman and Lara Croft. Though, when it comes to parts from Lara, Cassidy seems to has more depth. And this depth is what turns me off. I feel like there's too much to her personality.

I will remind you that this is my subjective opinion, and I simply gave a brief explanation of why I feel like that.

 

[Deleted member 76176]

I like her appearance. Freckles are nice and relatively rare. As for everything else, you mostly speak about her backstory. Based on this description I don't like her, because there is nothing to like. She is shy, socially awkward, has high EQ, and has harmful tendencies. It's way too little for me to see her as something other than an one-dimensional character.

Figured. I realized after posting that instead of a well-put character analysis, it reads more like a vague general introduction, which reveals little more than I intended. In my defense, it would have been boring and, well, difficult.

She is not a character meant to be liked. No, she has way too many negative traits attached to her and is riddled with problems for that. At best, most would find her unremarkable at first glance, and at worst, she would be disliked.

She is, however, the narrative focus of my novel, and I plan to capture every nuance of her that I possibly can. This is a very niche thing, and it's just me liking to write difficult, emotionally broken protagonists finding themselves in esoteric situations.

 

[RepresentingWrath]

which reveals little more than I intended.

Err, what? You revealed nothing.

she has way too many negative traits attached to her and is riddled with problems for that.

Depends, but usually I like such characters.

 

[Rhaps]

Charlotte Silvi

She/her

Long silver hair with a dull shine to them, though the tip of her hair changes depending on which power she uses. Her eyes are normally an azure blue, but that changes too depending on which power she's bringing out. One of the endings is her hair and eyes went full-on RGB.

165 cm tall, thin and lean body (though she wants to have big tits)

Age: 15

Personality: a sociopathic narcissistic bitch, who likes to do things her own way and would make someone's life miserable if they cross her, or just for her own amusement. Though she sticks by her code of "Not wearing a mask", as in she just wants to be herself, expressing herself no matter the cost. Manipulative, using others for her own enjoyment or to reach her enjoyment. A hypocrite.

The person who she respects: only herself.

Like: Having fun in general, riding a motorbike at a dangerous speed, streaming, fighting, dominating others, and making others feel weird.

Dislike: being controlled, working with a team, femboy Romulus, Satan who is also her adopted mother.

 

[Deleted member 76176]

Err, what? You revealed nothing

Perhaps. Though I did say it is very little, or it could be entirely in my head. I neither mentioned how she rebranded herself, elaborated on what I did mean by grieving without mourning, nor explained why she has an obsession with black, so I suppose it is only a fair judgment.

Depends, but usually I like such characters

Oh, have you read The Flower That Bloomed Nowhere? Nowhere Starts, Path Of The Wishper Woman, Sokaiseva, or anything similar? I think we can be good buddies, if you do.

 

[RepresentingWrath]

Charlotte Silvi

She/her

Long silver hair with a dull shine to them, though the tip of her hair changes depending on which power she uses. Her eyes are normally an azure blue, but that changes too depending on which power she's bringing out. One of the endings is her hair and eyes went full-on RGB.

165 cm tall, thin and lean body (though she wants to have big tits)

Age: 15

Personality: a sociopathic narcissistic bitch, who likes to do things her own way and would make someone's life miserable if they cross her, or just for her own amusement. Though she sticks by her code of "Not wearing a mask", as in she just wants to be herself, expressing herself no matter the cost. Manipulative, using others for her own enjoyment or to reach her enjoyment. A hypocrite.

The person who she respects: only herself.

Like: Having fun in general, riding a motorbike at a dangerous speed, streaming, fighting, dominating others, and making others feel weird.

Dislike: being controlled, working with a team, femboy Romulus, Satan who is also her adopted mother.

RGB is cool, other than that, boring. Don't like her appearence. Name is boring. But I like everything else. I think her personality really fits her age.

Perhaps. Though I did say it is very little, or it could be entirely in my head. I neither mentioned how she rebranded herself, elaborated on what I did mean by grieving without mourning, nor explained why she has an obsession with black, so I suppose it is only a fair judgment.

Why do you even ask for an opinion if you don't explain a thing? It's like asking for a feedback on a full story, but you only bring a very short synopsis.

Oh, have you read The Flower That Bloomed Nowhere? Nowhere Starts, Path Of The Wishper Woman, Sokaiseva, or anything similar? I think we can be good buddies, if you do.

I don't know what is similar as I haven't read these.

 

[Rhaps]

RGB is cool, other than that, boring. Don't like her appearence. Name is boring. But I like everything else. I think her personality really fits her age.

Can't do anything about appearance, since it's A.I generated but I did commissioned my friend for an actual cover.

Her name being boring and simple is the point, you don't really expect someone named Charlotte to be a psycho.

Though I appreciate the reviews.

 

[RepresentingWrath]

Can't do anything about appearance, since it's A.I generated but I did commissioned my friend for an actual cover.

You wrote a small description.

Long silver hair with a dull shine to them, though the tip of her hair changes depending on which power she uses. Her eyes are normally an azure blue, but that changes too depending on which power she's bringing out. One of the endings is her hair and eyes went full-on RGB.

165 cm tall, thin and lean body (though she wants to have big tits)

And I don't like it. With the exception of RGB, it's boring.

Her name being boring and simple is the point, you don't really expect someone named Charlotte to be a psycho.

Yes, and no. Charlotte AND Silvi are both boring because they are overused. Well, based on what I've seen and read. I'm not against boring names, but Charlotte, and to a lesser extent Silvi, is eveywhere.

 

[AnonUnlimited]

Name methsoabducen

 

[Seaspecter]

After reading the majority of these requests I realize that I may be the worst at describing my own character. Welp I'm going to go drink myself into unconsciousness.

 

[RepresentingWrath]

After reading the majority of these requests I realize that I may be the worst at describing my own character. Welp I'm going to go drink myself into unconsciousness.

I don't think your description was the worst. Also, drink responsibly!

 

[Seaspecter]

I don't think your description was the worst. Also, drink responsibly!

Trust me I will, I'm pushing 40 hard and a hangover feels like death at this point.

 

[Deleted member 76176]

Why do you even ask for an opinion if you don't explain a thing? It's like asking for a feedback on a story, but you only bring a very short synopsis.

It was my fault, and I wholeheartedly acknowledge it. You mentioned keeping it 5-7 sentences long, and seeing nobody writing essays, I wrote what I thought included the key characteristics, hinting at the nuances rather than directly pointing them out. It was only after story marc posted that I understood mine didn't mean anything, and I was too bad an author to properly articulate it.

The first point I mentioned was too difficult for me to answer.
Grief was an important recurring theme and would require me to write paragraphs to explain what I meant by that.
The third was a spoiler territory, one of the many backstories that contributed to shaping who and how she is now, including what caused her to stop.

Regardless, I think I'm wasting your time, so I'm sorry.

I don't know what is similar as I haven't read these.

I do recommend, strongly.