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[Kazehiro]

One does not simply stop gathering wives.

I can't stop because ... I will be there for everyone ... as we head toward our shared future, leaving the past behind.

 

[Rosica]

I can't stop because ... I will be there for everyone ... as we head toward our shared future, leaving the past behind.

Kelas King

Your crown is on transit at DC Cakung.

 

[ThirstyWater]

I have edited and revised chapters 1-5. May I ask for feedback?

Edit: I revised again chapter 1

Grim Mirth: The Clown System

Jack Wilson was just an ordinary clown — the kind you might see at a children's party or a small park performance. Until the day he woke up in another person's body… in a world that was not his own. A world where danger hides in the shadows, and extraordinary beings...

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