Need Some Feedback

[Axiweave]

Just want to check up on my story and see how it would look to other readers. Any feedback is welcome.

My story: Ocean High: A Sea Of Brilliant Minds

 

[EymenSD]

Good

 

[Axiweave]

Good

Thanks!

 

[SeaJay]

Your story itself is excellent, but your synopsis could do with breaking up.
Something like this:

Orian, a 168 IQ teen with an expressive personality and violent side.
Wox, a 179 IQ teen with an icy personality and expressionless face.
What do these two boys have in common? Their whole appearance because they’re twins.
After being given the chance to attend a special government-endorsed school and reuniting, they quickly discover that Ocean High isn’t normal. Now they face a brilliant student body, a dangerous curriculum with challenges, and the worst problem of all.
Tolerating each other.

Is good enough for me - it's easier on the eyes and more engaging. However, you can improve it even further!
Other than that, well, I'm going to read it after the other books I'm currently reading.

 

[Axiweave]

Your story itself is excellent, but your synopsis could do with breaking up.
Something like this:

Is good enough for me - it's easier on the eyes and more engaging.
Other than that, well, I'm going to read it after the other books I'm currently reading.

That actually seems way better. Thanks for the feedback, I’m going to add it right now. Really, thanks!