Oops, sorry. Just an opinion on the cover and description, and if you hate time to check the first chapter, that too! Thanks!
Well, I won't beat around the bush. I've read the title, synopsis, and chapter 1 (prologue?). Here are my impressions:
(1) The title is too generic and abstract. New readers will have a hard time imagining the direction of your story just from the title. I suggest you read
this thread.
(2) Your cover is too abstract. SH covers that sell well typically use an anime or light novel style with one or more characters. It would be better if there was an elegant heroine without clickbait (the heroine should actually play an active role).
(3) Your synopsis is more like a vague summary of the story. A good synopsis should be an emotional experience that makes the reader care about your story.
Your synopsis doesn't even provide a relatable identity for the reader. Put yourself in the shoes of a new reader, what makes your reader care about your protagonist?
Try to find a relatable protagonist identity for the reader. For example, a young orphaned astronaut who misses his only little sister.
Then you can add stakes to keep the story tense. For example:
An astronaut who travels between planets in search of a place for humanity to live (humanitarian stake) or perhaps an astronaut who searches for a certain rare substance to cure his little sister's strange disease (personal stake).
In general, a synopsis with a hook should be written in the following formula:
Protagonist identity that is relatable for the reader + main conflict + stakes + threat/challenge.
(4) The prologue chapter is actually not bad, in fact it's quite good in the middle to the end of the chapter. I can see a hook here that makes the reader curious, where the protagonist goes. But unfortunately, this hook is a bit late... I'm not sure causal readers with short attention spans will read until the end of the chapter, they might stop in the middle. Why?
Because your narrative is very cold. I can imagine spaceships, black holes, interstellar space, but this is the problem. Presenting this kind of clinical information at the beginning of the prologue chapter feels very cold and neutral.
The reader is just a passive observer like a report reader. I didn't feel any tension at all when your spaceship crashed and was sucked into the black hole (if I remember correctly).
Even when the spaceship was destroyed, so what? It was just scrap metal. I didn't feel the need to care about scrap metal. You know what I mean?! This is what I mean by cold accident report.
If you want your readers to feel emotionally attached to your story from the beginning of the chapter, then you need to change your narrative to an emotional experience for the reader. You can change the POV from the spaceship journey to the journey of an astronaut inside the spaceship.
Try to narrate what the astronaut experienced on board the ship before the accident. You can build a narrative of the astronaut's activities on board, providing a false sense of calm before the accident. Make the reader identify with your protagonist. This way, when the accident occurs, the reader will feel compassion.
Well, that's a little feedback from me.
Regards.
