I read the first couple chapters, and it's not a style of talking I'm used to, so I can't judge individual characterization well. It feels like the speech style and some idioms are transcribed from another language, which isn't bad? But I don't know what 'normal' sounds like when people talk like this, since I'm not used to it, and few people talk enough for me to get a good idea of their individual speech style.
Generally, if you want feedback on your work, you'd be better off posting in the Story Feedback forum and including a link-- because it's in author general and you rambled a bit, I think people thought you were looking on advice for how to do things.
I dislike this artist\studio. Also, it's not that hard to find manhua with crappy art. A quick glance at aggregator sites, Super Wechat, Beipo Chengwei Fanpai Zhuixu, Immortal Swordsman in the Reverse World, and many, many more.
Yes
Google translate the author name for example
It tell its chinese
But for me its mostly the style of drawing i recognize
Despite being gorgeous, you can see that the quality miss the seriously of KR manhwas
I mean. Look at the ........"secondary characteristics"
sometimes its too big
or the jokes, even if it's a KR xianxia, they wont some of the jokes like that
Also KR manhwas won't do blatant fanservices (unless ero pornhwa)
Now you are a clear proof of how bad the influence of capitalists publishing crappy manhuas since a while, is XD
You mistake it as manhwa, so that also mean probably hundred thousands or maybe millions also mistake it
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Meanwhile
Martial Streamer manhwa [From the studio that brought you Reincarnation of the Murim Clan’s Former Ranker.] TaeMin was a student taking a gap year, when he ended up electrocuting himself while trying to become a Youtuber. However, he ends up being reincarnated as Zhao Ga-hui in a world of...
manhuamix.com
Is manhwa
despite xianxia and chinese atmosphere and world, even the fact the kr protag speak chinese after reincarnating
and even copied lot of 2023 chinese webnovels ideas (like livestreaming)
Yes
Google translate the author name for example
It tell its chinese
But for me its mostly the style of drawing i recognize
Despite being gorgeous, you can see that the quality miss the seriously of KR manhwas
I mean. Look at the ........"secondary characteristics"
sometimes its too big
or the jokes, even if it's a KR xianxia, they wont some of the jokes like that
Also KR manhwas won't do blatant fanservices (unless ero pornhwa)
Now you are a clear proof of how bad the influence of capitalists publishing crappy manhuas since a while, is XD
You mistake it as manhwa, so that also mean probably hundred thousands or maybe millions also mistake it
Actually I saw some NON 18+ manhwa with the same level of fanservice and type of jokes. That's the second reason why I thought it is Korean. The first and main reason is obviously quality of art. Btw, the third reason, I didn't bother to check the author.
I read the first couple chapters, and it's not a style of talking I'm used to, so I can't judge individual characterization well. It feels like the speech style and some idioms are transcribed from another language, which isn't bad? But I don't know what 'normal' sounds like when people talk like this, since I'm not used to it, and few people talk enough for me to get a good idea of their individual speech style.
Generally, if you want feedback on your work, you'd be better off posting in the Story Feedback forum and including a link-- because it's in author general and you rambled a bit, I think people thought you were looking on advice for how to do things.
Well... Iam not really sure . That if the conversation was normal. Speaking of iam not even that much person who is a social person.
So... Iam not sure about this
Well... Iam not really sure . That if the conversation was normal. Speaking of iam not even that much person who is a social person.
So... Iam not sure about this
Actually I saw some NON 18+ manhwa with the same level of fanservice and type of jokes. That's the second reason why I thought it is Korean. The first and main reason is obviously quality of art. Btw, the third reason, I didn't bother to check the author.
Nono, not blaming to check author name (people rarely do that)
Its just a way to proof that i didn't lie
Non 18+ manhwa same level
Oh..................now i remember, its true, there are some
But for quality of art, true
Because it's indeed illogical, stuff can jump in quality in a big jump
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For that, its mostly caused by BILIBILI (heaven website for chinese 2d enjoyer)
that began to finance their own adaptations like
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If you look at ch1 of Cutting wood
there is :
BILIBILI logo (the =_=b cube head guy)
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And the jump of quality is another proof of my sentence that 2023 chinese WNs have lot of series with "KONOSUBA-quality" works
(when i say "KONOSUBA-quality, is like a term of comparison, similar to TNT or 1 hiroshima bomb as a counting value)
The sudden jump is as crazy as if in an alternate universe, its suddenly jumping from DBZ or EVANGELION (tv first version) to like Demon Slayer movie financed by fans. With reason being with capitalists being retards that thought "oh wow, dbz is popular so we gonna rack money by only allowing muscle battle mangas on the market despite webnovels on internet having 10m of views, we are smart, we know what want teens, revenue dont lie"
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is manhua
Btw, i was there, when the series began its very first chapter as a webnovel
Not kidding
but dropped after XX chapters, because i thought at that time that it gonna be axed like any chinese webnovel that have a too big original and go out of control
Actually I saw some NON 18+ manhwa with the same level of fanservice and type of jokes. That's the second reason why I thought it is Korean. The first and main reason is obviously quality of art. Btw, the third reason, I didn't bother to check the author.
Nono, not blaming to check author name (people rarely do that)
Its just a way to proof that i didn't lie
Non 18+ manhwa same level
Oh..................now i remember, its true, there are some
But for quality of art, true
Because it's indeed illogical, stuff can jump in quality in a big jump
-------------------------------------
For that, its mostly caused by BILIBILI (heaven website for chinese 2d enjoyer)
that began to finance their own adaptations like View attachment 21558
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If you look at ch1 of Cutting wood
there is : View attachment 21559
BILIBILI logo (the =_=b cube head guy)
--------------
And the jump of quality is another proof of my sentence that 2023 chinese WNs have lot of series with "KONOSUBA-quality" works
(when i say "KONOSUBA-quality, is like a term of comparison, similar to TNT or 1 hiroshima bomb as a counting value)
The sudden jump is as crazy as if in an alternate universe, its suddenly jumping from DBZ or EVANGELION (tv first version) to like Demon Slayer movie financed by fans. With reason being with capitalists being retards that thought "oh wow, dbz is popular so we gonna rack money by only allowing muscle battle mangas on the market despite webnovels on internet having 10m of views, we are smart, we know what want teens, revenue dont lie"
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is manhua
Btw, i was there, when the series began its very first chapter as a webnovel
Not kidding
but dropped after XX chapters, because i thought at that time that it gonna be axed like any chinese webnovel that have a too big original and go out of control
Btw don't critic me on "judge something not just what you like or dislike"
Because its one of my biggest strong point
I can accept criticism on my favorite stuff, and even mention them
Or even praising stuff i dislike
Its like Reverend Insanity
I hate it. Because i hate evilness or evil protag
(heck even disliked when spoiled a bear moment / killed a girl)
But nonetheless i can tell its a great novel for people that like it for its quality.
ps : if i sound hysteric with previous posts, is because i am in a rush, and writing can't convain the tone correcly
ps ps : reason i can judge like that, is because i try to disconnect my feelings (and partially succeed) because of circumstances i wont mention in my life. Hence caused that i can judge with neutrality like a machine or a food judge. But nonetheless, what needs to be bashed still is bashed on. Its like criticizing Diablo4. It is normal if i mention all the numerous ultra garbage points of Diablo4 it could sound like i have a giga hate for it or flaming
Funny info that probably gonna interest you
(not sure if you are reader of novel)
THE AFTER-STORIES of novel
IS EVEN BETTER than isekai part
In fact MYSELF
i became reader of arifureta because i heard the after-stories got MC being back on earth and stuff
AND GOSH its good
In fact, i cried for some scenes
like the "betrayer hero dude,
despite fainting, with a body so damaged he doesnt look like human, he still defend the floor-door-bunker with the princess"
or "family of FLs and MC journey with them to retrace their journey and use a spell to show image of the past,
and when MC fall in abyss, mc's mom in tears despite knowing its illusion put out her hand in a gesture of trying to catch him"
or the fact the trolling robot character
got a op backstory (side novel and manga for her btw)
Tip 1 : Write a separate text that tell the details of your story, like character biography, the plot, powers, etc
Because even the best of authors forget stuff and they do that.
Tip 2 : Imagine the character is alive or PUT YOURSELF in the shoes of him (like an actor, warning dangerous sometimes if cant get out)
Tip 3: Uh, next time, don't skip line every sentence when posting on forum. Or you could Shift+Enter so it jump line but not a lot
Tip 4 : Try to do "TLDR" for your case you end your post with "TLDR : Please someone try my series and see if dialogue is weird"
Tip 5 : Re-read your post or preview your post next time ^^"
It hurts to delete lot of text already written but sometimes its necessary
Tip 6 : If you can't solve a problem, its a good idea to analyze part per part (=looking at your dialogue word by word)
