I started a chapter with:

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Are we talking about how we did start our prologues? Or is it every chapter?
 

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Horror comes in many flavors. For one colony of gingerbread gnomes, this Yule is deadly.
You started your chapter with this?
I think I need help. How did you start your chapter today?
Just begin with a cool ass quote
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Are we talking about how we did start our prologues? Or is it every chapter?
I think he means chapter not prologue. He said chapter in the second line
 

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If you are asking how I began my first chapter, it was with: "Silence prevailed over the sprawling metropolis of Dal'gur. Each of the four districts, separated by titanic walls of stone, were devoid of any noise."
A little redundant but stresses the point. Or do you mean how i begin a prologue?
 

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"Have you heard of the Demon who travelled far away from home? (Intro ends in) ."Regions she thought were only just fairytales… because they were told by Fairies. Get it? Fairy tale? Or is it a Fairy’s tale?”
 
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Are we talking about how we did start our prologues? Or is it every chapter?
Just whatever you wrote today.
If you are asking how I began my first chapter, it was with: "Silence prevailed over the sprawling metropolis of Dal'gur. Each of the four districts, separated by titanic walls of stone, were devoid of any noise."
A little redundant but stresses the point. Or do you mean how i begin a prologue?
chapter
 
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Just whatever you wrote today.
Well, since I'm writing my 15th volume today, here's the first sentence of the prologue:

"Hinwe Tal-Inwir, the current Elf Saint, or as she was known by her official title, the Custodian of Cherwoods’ Divine Waters."

First sentence of the first chapter:

"For six years after the arrival of the demon people in Chersea, humanity had lived peacefully with them."

First sentence of the second chapter:

"A couple of days after that dream, there was a significant change in the mood of the people inside the Human Saint’s official residence."

I think he means chapter not prologue. He said chapter in the second line
Not related, but for some reason, I was not notified when you quoted my reply. Strange... :blob_hmm_two:
 
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[It's been a while since I quit school.

My mother kept urging me to go back, "Don't you care about your own future?" she said.

Honestly, I never liked school in the first place.

If I truly love school, I'd go there when I'm depressed, instead of quitting.]

the opening of my first chapter.

though it's more of collection of short stories.

for the most part, i don't feel that my first sentences and paragraphs matter that much. they're mostly just to set the tone so it'd be easier to write further. the most important bits for me often went in the middle or the end.
 

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This is sitting in drafts:
Waylen walked into another room in his basement.

It was full of glass jars and tubes, with many liquids of various colors shining warmly in the cold blue illumination of the ceiling lights.

Quickly overlooking the place, he grabbed a syringe, filled it with a green liquid from one of the containers, and walked out.
The wording is awkward, I dunno what to do here
 
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This is sitting in drafts:

The wording is awkward, I dunno what to do here
It is good. Makes you think what is the green liquid, and what Waylen is going to do? Is he going to go and inject it in a dying patient? Is he going to use it to kills someone? It has a promise in it, one that it is on a bright note, seeing as you used shining warmly in your description. So, the reader would expect for the MC to help someone with the green liquid.
 

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It is good. Makes you think what is the green liquid, and what Waylen is going to do? Is he going to go and inject it in a dying patient? Is he going to use it to kills someone? It has a promise in it, one that it is on a bright note, seeing as you used shining warmly in your description. So, the reader would expect for the MC to help someone with the green liquid.
thanks!
 

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“You’re pregnant.”

Honoka tried really hard not to roll her eyes. “We gathered that. Could you tell us how far along she is?”
 
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“You’re pregnant.”

Honoka tried really hard not to roll her eyes. “We gathered that. Could you tell us how far along she is?”
Ah, a visit to the doctor. Wait, don't you write GL? Is one of the monster girls, you know? With extra plumbing?
 

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Horror comes in many flavors. For one colony of gingerbread gnomes, this Yule is deadly.

I think I need help. How did you start your chapter today?
Being on grandpa thinker's bad list is scary.

Also chapter start:
Alex froze. He didn't want to provoke the group. He knew that if he moved they might attack him. Also, the fact that he was surrounded by dirty men who were dressed like they could be cavemen was not what he was expecting. For lack of anything else fitting to say for the situation he stammered, "Um, Hello? I'm Alex."
 
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Being on grandpa thinker's bad list is scary.

Also chapter start:
Alex froze. He didn't want to provoke the group. He knew that if he moved they might attack him. Also, the fact that he was surrounded by dirty men who were dressed like they could be cavemen was not what he was expecting. For lack of anything else fitting to say for the situation he stammered, "Um, Hello? I'm Alex."
And then they began to dance around him, chanting Santa's name, as the snow fell around them? XD

Good start, btw. Sounds interesting.
 
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