Suffering
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Well, I am giving a brief synopsis here:
Kael bought an ice cream. It melted. Then he got infected, took a free ticket, and woke up in someone else's body — the body of a holy sacrifice on a pilgrimage to a temple that expects him to die. He has no powers, no blessings, and no intention of being a hero. He just wants to survive. Even if that means poisoning the knight who's supposed to protect him.
It is:
Slow-paced. Minimal LitRPG elements. Antihero protagonist. Psychological focus.
What I am looking for:
I would suggest reading till chapter 7, as the story starts taking shape here.
You can be as ruthless as you want.
That said, if something worked, tell me that too. I want to know what to protect as much as what to fix.
Kael bought an ice cream. It melted. Then he got infected, took a free ticket, and woke up in someone else's body — the body of a holy sacrifice on a pilgrimage to a temple that expects him to die. He has no powers, no blessings, and no intention of being a hero. He just wants to survive. Even if that means poisoning the knight who's supposed to protect him.
It is:
Slow-paced. Minimal LitRPG elements. Antihero protagonist. Psychological focus.
What I am looking for:
- Does the slow pacing in the early chapters (ice cream, facility, pool) hold your attention, or does it feel like a barrier to entry?
- Any moment that felt boring or too slow (Facility, Pool, Pain sequence, etc.)?
- Is there anything I should have done differently in the chapters (Leon's betrayal, The Facility staff, etc.)?
- Do you like Kael?
I would suggest reading till chapter 7, as the story starts taking shape here.
You can be as ruthless as you want.
That said, if something worked, tell me that too. I want to know what to protect as much as what to fix.