Hey everyone 
I’m currently writing a web-serial and I’m looking for honest feedback from readers as I improve it chapter by chapter.
If you enjoy dark fantasy / LitRPG / psychological tension / system-based stories, I’d really appreciate you giving it a try.
My story: QueenMaster Rising
If you read even 1–3 chapters, I’d love your feedback on things like:
Even short comments like “this part was cool” or “this confused me” help a lot.
I’m still developing the story and trying to shape it into something really strong for long-term readers. Early feedback helps me improve before the story grows too big to adjust easily.
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If you decide to read or leave feedback, I genuinely appreciate it. Even silent readers are welcome—but feedback helps me improve faster and make the story better for everyone.
I’m currently writing a web-serial and I’m looking for honest feedback from readers as I improve it chapter by chapter.
If you enjoy dark fantasy / LitRPG / psychological tension / system-based stories, I’d really appreciate you giving it a try.
My story: QueenMaster Rising
- Genre: Dark Sci-Fi / LitRPG / Progression Fantasy / Action-Adventure
- Focus: Character-driven tension, system mechanics, slow-burn mystery, Fast-paced Action.
- Current length: Early chapters (easy to read through quickly)
What I’m Looking For
If you read even 1–3 chapters, I’d love your feedback on things like:
- Is the pacing engaging or too slow/fast?
- Are the characters interesting or confusing?
- Does the world feel immersive?
- Anything that feels unclear or needs improvement
- Honest reactions (what worked / what didn’t)
Even short comments like “this part was cool” or “this confused me” help a lot.
Why I’m Asking
I’m still developing the story and trying to shape it into something really strong for long-term readers. Early feedback helps me improve before the story grows too big to adjust easily.
Link to Story
QueenMaster Rising
Alorihime Escarth lives a double life, office worker by day, high-magic operative by night, hunting threats for an organization that officially doesn’t exist and unofficially prevents the world from falling apart. In a realm shaped by ancient systems and aura-wielders, she’s one of the few who...
Thank You
If you decide to read or leave feedback, I genuinely appreciate it. Even silent readers are welcome—but feedback helps me improve faster and make the story better for everyone.