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    Feedback for Lilly: Story of a Girl

    I don't think such topics would hurt the book negatively, but the problem is this, people don't always do what they say, don't mean what they say, don't believe what they say. We readers know that the teacher lost her sister (the hints tell me she committed suicide), so of course she'll help...
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    How do you let your character succeed his first trial?

    Negotiation, bring them to their side.
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    Have any nice music or ambiance you listen to whilst you write?

    This is what I listen to when I'm really focusing, like a "No distractions allowed." This one I listen to when I'm bored of the above. When I need more inspiration or there's a fighting scene I listen to Keiichi Okabe (MONACA)...
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    Feedback for Lilly: Story of a Girl

    I also recommend you this video and channel, it shows how some little dialogue helps us understand the characters.
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    Writing Prompt Your character stumbles upon a local delicacy.

    My protagonist can't taste food, nor does she needs to eat :sweat_smile:
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    Feedback for Lilly: Story of a Girl

    I love magical girls, so I'm going to keep reading it. But for now I have only read the first chapter, and I don't know if you explored more or it isn't a problem anymore. So based only on the first chapter. It needs more built up, I couldn't empathize with the MC because I haven't been in a...
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    Feedback for Lilly: Story of a Girl

    I read the first chapter, I suggest you put more space in your text. On the phone it's just a big wall of text, making it uncomfortable to read.
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    I Bear a Grudge so Deep and True...

    He dropped the story and has PM blocked. I wanted to send him a message but couldn't :(
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    Do you like to use brain when reading?

    I love complex stories with lots of foreshadowing, subversion of expectations, plot twist and that the series connect to each other. Making me wonder what's going to happen next and imagine lots of theories. Like my favorite series: Wa Yuusha de Aru.
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    I Bear a Grudge so Deep and True...

    Yesterday I received a 2 star review on Royal Road. My frustration comes from the fact that just two chapters more and he would have realized I didn't forget the consequences of a certain event (rape). He expected her to be broken, and she is, I planned to show it on the next chapters and...
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    How would you guys feel about this? (NSFW)

    To answer the question, I don't find it weird at all. On the contrary, fetishes such as thigh sex already exist; I imagine your idea like a reversal of titjob, handjob, assjob, feetjob, etc. Instead of having the women use different parts of their body to pleasure a man, having the men do the...
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    Recommendations GL

    I recommend A lesbian elf and a cursed princess My disciple wants to tease me everyday Ice Queen I favor the villainess Who moved my ashes Girl friends (manga) Kase san (manga) Virgin's empire (manga) Tadokoro san (manga) Looking up to magical girls (manga bdsm) Living in the last days Toto's...
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    What kind of reader are you?

    I really wish I could buy the title, it is so interesting but the story has nothing to do with it. After more than 100 chapters they finally addressed the end of the world, and it was already prevented because the MC exist (Ridiculous). I lost interest after that, but I wanted to see some...
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    What kind of reader are you?

    I had high hopes for The villains need to save the world? Too bad the author is obsessed with throwing girl after girl for the MC to rape. And the ones who really want to be with her, she ignores them :confused:
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    What makes you drop a story?

    This is the reason I dropped three stories I liked a lot. What I hate the most and ruins a novel for me is the characters becoming a device for the plot. I hate it when the characters suddenly become stupid or act out of character so the story can continue the way the author planned. I find...
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    Why? What makes you want to write? What is your "Writer's Creed"?

    I write to help people, if my ideas and concepts help them improve their lives that's fantastic. And if I could make a living of it that would be amazing, a dream come true.
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    What kind of reader are you?

    I'm an addict reader, if I'm really liking the novel I read it all day and even sacrifice hours of sleep, getting to the point where I only sleep two hours until I caught up. I read yuri, fantasy and action, sometimes comedy too. I favorite the chapters if they're good, and comment when I love...
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