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  1. Proctor

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    The name miss likely came from an autocorrect and I must've run with it, sorry about that. You said all that action pieces together after 100 chapters. If one assumes an average of 2000 words a pop, that's still 200,000 words before people get a deeper understanding of your overarching plot...
  2. Proctor

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    I didn’t forget you, I’m just a bit busy. Sorry about that. Anyways, here are my uneducated rambles. Now, I’ll be the first guy to admit he’s not big on works that are primarily focused as battle shounen, so this will very likely color my review as we go on. I also got to chapter 17, then super...
  3. Proctor

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    Hello, sorry for the late feedback. I got to about the end of chapter 10 and skimmed the other 4 before posting my uneducated rambles. First up, I probably don’t have to mention the detriments a lack of cover has, so I’ll gloss over it. The Author’s note in the synopsis doesn’t have the right...
  4. Proctor

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    (You didn’t specify where, so I’ll put my uneducated ramblings here.) I read both available chapters at the time of this post. There weren’t even a thousand words for me to look at, so forgive me if I can’t get into many specifics. So, um, let's start with the synopsis. I uh, didn’t really get...
  5. Proctor

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    (You said I can choose, so I’ll put it here.) This isn’t exactly related to my review, but how prevalent is the tragedy element in your story? This tag doesn’t tend to do so hot on this site (people like to filter it out), which is why I was curious. I also read all 17 chapters available at the...
  6. Proctor

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    Oh, you only have one chapter at the time of me posting this. Alright then. Before I get to the story itself, I want to talk about the synopsis. In my opinion, as one sentence it is way too generic to attract most people outside of those interested in assassins. It doesn’t describe anything...
  7. Proctor

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    Yeah, I also prefer when the main character and heroines have to work together rather than the MC stomping his way through while the ladies sit and watch. Choosing a power that highlights these sorts of mutually beneficial relations is usually a plus in my book since it's one of the positive...
  8. Proctor

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    Wow, I’m surprised how small the world is at times. Before I get into the meat of my feedback, let me just say that I’ve actually read the first two volumes of this series before when I was just a lowly anon, but I’ll still give part of the first volume another look over for my review. I’ll...
  9. Proctor

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    It's alright, admittedly I think my tone might've come off harsher than I intended when I wrote your feedback. I think it was mainly due to the fact I wanted to use as much clarity as I could so as little as possible would be misunderstood. Like I said in the piece, there is a lot to find...
  10. Proctor

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    (Sorry I took a while. Without further ado, these are my uneducated rambles.) Initially, I looked at your smut story, then I saw the way sex was written and decided to pass. Your biggest issue lies with Euphonics in regards to that. Unless I missed the joke and it was all meant to be a satire...
  11. Proctor

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    You're welcome, I'm glad if anything said is something one might find useful. I do want to reply again to clarify a few things in your response, though. As for the cover, I understand. I also lack any artistic talent to speak of but I found it prudent to mention it just in case. Onomatopeia...
  12. Proctor

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    (You didn’t specify, so you get my uneducated feedback here.) I read all 30 chapters you had to offer at the time of my posting this review. You surprised me, and I guess I should elaborate on why. To me, your story encapsulates the point that a powerful concept and colorful cast of characters...
  13. Proctor

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    (Since you gave me a choice, I decided to put my review here.) First off, I learned a new word. Soucouyant is something I’d never seen before, so thank you for that. I also got up to chapter 12, which I think is all the current releases. So your prologue is quite colorful. Literally too. I...
  14. Proctor

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    Holy moly, I come back to see three more stories. I underestimated the demand, whoops. I’ll be going to sleep after this, so I'll try to get through the new backlog tomorrow. (You also didn’t specify, so you get my uneducated ramblings right here. By the way, is your PFP an AlchRove girl...
  15. Proctor

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    (You didn’t mention where you wanted it, so I’ll assume you wanted it here. Guess I’ll put that in my disclaimer for the future.) What immediately catches me is your synopsis; or lack of one. You should be aware that such a simple rendition of your synopsis means that you’re riding entirely on...
  16. Proctor

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    First off, thanks for giving me a go. I'm relatively new here so I guess the best way to advertise myself is with an example. I see you went with smut out of the gate, which is quite the ballsy choice. You mentioned in your author's note that readers can expect a 50/50 split between porn and...
  17. Proctor

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    I've created this thread in the hope of honing my self-editing skills. If you do post here looking for a review, do note that it may take a while - from hours to days - to get back to you depending on my circumstances. (work, my writing, etc.) What to expect: An amateur's general opinion of...
  18. Proctor

    Which of these titles do you think would be best for my new novel?

    I don't like any but the last one, but judging by your other novel, sticking to simplicity might be more in your favor. In light of those circumstances, I'd go for 1 myself.
  19. Proctor

    What's the 'normal' drop in views after first few chapters?

    As an aside, there are people like me who might jump to a specific chapter and skim about to see if the author satisfies a certain threshold of mine before actually giving the story a go for real. This usually happens when the smut is frequent and explicit (no need to worry about spoiling...
  20. Proctor

    I wrote this, and I'm not proud.

    Is this a new attempt at rivaling the greatness that is Invisible Dragon? A new forbidden tome like My Immortal? Whichever the case, if the knight can run across water why not do a drive-by pick up and maintain momentum instead of going for a swing. What a waste, smh.
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