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Somebody hire me, please! I don't wanna be unemployed any more!!!

I'm pretty curious why. Like, was it too smutty? I'm shocked, tbh.

Bibliofiction. The same style and theme that is used in "Ascendance of a Bookworm."

If you do a half decent job of writing an isekai overpowered harem bullshit fantasy, you will be met with a modest sum of success. The important part is enjoying what you're writing about. Take for example Stephen King. He is so practiced in the art of written horror that literally anything he...

I know you said to omit grammar mistakes, but I feel it's still worth mentioning that awkward sentence structure sometimes makes me drop a book as soon as chapter one. If it is difficult for me to the point of needing to reread entire sentences or paragraphs with any considerable frequency, I...

New content is out for HOAL. Check 2.2 out at https://www.scribblehub.com/read/166652-haruhism-of-a-lesser/chapter/190336!

Monk. I thought the rules were to review the poster's above you?

Reading it through while drafting my own 2.2. Do you want the review directly on the main page of your story or in this thread?

Heh. Spoilers. :^) Looking back, there are a number of places that are kinda... questionable. That one you mentioned where the same language is used twice in quick succession included. The last couple paragraphs need to be rewritten, I think, too. Thanks again for pointing it out. :)

That second one is one I'll need to think about. "Goeogl" is an intentional misspelling of "Google" and follows a trend of word-scrambling proper nouns into recognizable misspellings, e.g. Amricea. It's one of those that should make sense if one reads from the beginning, but I'll add it to the...

I've finished the chapter. There are a couple things I still need to think about regarding it, but I'm leaving it till after the chapter's fully done. What do you think?

New content for Haruhism of a Lesser! Read chapter 2.1 at https://www.scribblehub.com/read/166652-haruhism-of-a-lesser/chapter/188872/

Hahaha, Professor Rearden would love you!

I'm glad there are some people who liked the paragraph as is. :) It'd be pretty depressing for me if everybody had a hard time with it! The stuff you're asking is valid. My initial opinion was to include a bit more in the quoted paragraph. I've also considered inserting a paragraph after the...

Solid critique. Thanks, bud!

The angel is a reference to a two-chapters-ago scene and the first two sentences are a reference to the paragraphs immediately preceding this one. I tried reading it without the leadup, and it feels too sudden. I wonder if there's something I could add inbetween to soften the split, though? I...

Fair point! Personally would welcome the challenge to improve my photoshop skills, though.