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Faith is the death of reason. - Albert Einstein

I can tell your style of writing action scenes is different from mine but I thought I might as well share mine to see if you get anything out of it. So basically for me, I found the style that works for me in writing is that text is not a very good tool for describing action because it just...

Flesh Magic, its basically the more messed up version of Hemomancy or Blood Magic with a touch of Soul Magic. Which is the ability to alter living creatures and bodies. Essentially creating living weapons. Like turning arm bones into blades, fire bone projectiles filled with toxins, pathogens...

The last on my list would be a dung beetle, because I would literally eat shit for a living. :s_smile: (Not sure if insects count)

Yep most of the heat lost is through the torso, neck, head and armpits. The legs are less of a factor. This is due to the presence of major arteries in those regions. Technically the inner thigh also loses a lot of heat which is why you see some cultures that live in hot regions wear skirt/kilt...

Yes I would say it depends because some culture actually go shirtless in the tropics while the Europeans wore long sleeves and long pants. I think this is partly due to biological factors as well. Like Europeans were more vulnerable so sunburn which may be why they were more afraid of it. As for...

If he's under the sun constantly he may opt for long sleeve shirts and pants. Being hot is preferable to being sun burnt 24/7. A bandana is good for stopping sweat from dripping and a hat would be good for blocking out the sun. It all depends on what his job is, people often chose clothing by...

Don't worry about it at the end of the day it's YOUR story. I'm just giving my two cents of an out of context scene. Remember I'm just some random guy on the internet, this story is yours so make it what you want it to be. Emotional characters who abandon logic are quite difficult to write. If...

Yeah what ever advice you get on forums is at best theory, you still need practice in application to really improve. So I would suggest just posting it and see how it goes.

So first thing I would like to say is that as a scene in isolation it seems a little cringe, but that's normal for this case. The reasons for this is that cringe as a thing although subjective, there are ways to mitigate it even if you don't change the scene itself. Cringe from what I understand...

For emotional impact, the main way is stakes in the story. A story that the protagonist has something to lose or stands to fail creates tension. When there is something on the line then the reader will be more likely get invested. This doesn't have to be something grim and morbid, one example I...

I feel stale side characters can be due to lack of attention placed upon them by the story. If they are only props made to follow the main character around and they barely get much meaningful lines they can come across as flat. This is inevitable for some characters so I would first suggest you...

Tell me what you think, I'm not sure if the initial hook is good enough. The original plan was to put the first two chapters together, so I'm not sure if splitting then was a good idea. They were split due to pacing reasons, it just seemed better to split it at the time but now I'm not sure...

https://www.scribblehub.com/series/222343/diary-of-a-lost-soldier-in-another-world/ Tell me what you think, first time writing in first person POV so any criticisms would be good. I suspect my opening hook isn't good enough along with a slightly awkward start and the opening chapters are a bit...

Well if you are looking for something like that I can recommend my story. It's over 100k words at the time of this post and it looks to be doing well as far as feedback and ratings go both on SH and RR. Currently it's ending the first "volume/major arc" in the story so I guess this is a good...

Not sure if this is what you want but I have a few lying around in my head that I used in my story or plan to use. Mostly iterated from existing stuff used to fit my story. Feel free to adapt them as needed after all writing is about iteration. The ones in bold are the parts I feel may be able...

Like those above I would say take a break, writing should be fun, and when it gets too tiring just leave it for a while and come back if you want to. I would also like to say don't be too worried about how your writing is not good enough, someone will always be better than someone else. Even if...