Search results

Yeah, I got that kind of feeling too, the problem about a rating that didn't follow with a review was pretty confusing, it's like we were forced to assume what these people didn't like about the story, so my advice was don't think too much about it, post your story in the feedback or author...

The fact that he was a top-five player already gave away his love for the game or any game in general, only people dedicated to something that usually came out at the top. Ok, you need to elaborate this kind of thing instead of just telling he 'escape' from the doctor. Ok... but don't...

V-ing required to be or a verb before it, for example: The clouds were floating around with the two suns glared shining down on him. I don't know about other but when you joined both that and this next to each other, it's like you are very lacking of vocabulary, I am sorry if you feel offended...

This is redundant, you can shorten the sentence like: Kevin loved to play video games to the point he was diagnosed to develop 'internet gaming disorder' I don't know much about treatment or such, but was he being forced to meet the doctor or something? And you needed to explain first why he...

so your story took place in both Earth and Other world? Sounds cool!

You already have pokemon and Digimon, what else do you need?

Is it Isekai or fantasy theme?

I understand that if you create a story that takes place on Earth, naturally you can just create things based on available resources, but what about any Isekai or Fantasy story that took place was not on Earth? How far that you would create that world? Maybe the sun called the moon and moon...

1. MC who behaved without reasonably reason and no either explanation from the author or translator, for example: Not caring to what he or she wear into a party, unless they meant to irritate the host, their home had a fire which burn all the rest of clothing, and they are not 'normal'. 2...

A plot twist

Love what you create, otherwise, it's utterly pointless...

So, my parents want to sell our house, I thought I was fine with it... but I have this kind of feeling... like uncomfortable notion... it's really hard to explain...

I am sorry too, I am writing in a third person.

I know what Pronoun is, I was kidding, but thank you for the advice.

No

How do you use Pronoun to help the reader not to get confused in the scene with so many characters involved?

I love this family

I grew up on anime and manga, that's part of me now...

Thank you