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  1. blushiemagic

    Feedback wanted for first few chapters of unposted story

    It's somewhat lacking in formatting options, but other than that I'm satisfied. I get to write on both my computer and phone and everything stays synced, and it's not google.
  2. blushiemagic

    Feedback wanted for first few chapters of unposted story

    I think it's specifically the middle paragraph of the synopsis. I might try to find a way to completely rewrite that later.
  3. blushiemagic

    Feedback wanted for first few chapters of unposted story

    Deep POV theory is extremely helpful, thank you!
  4. blushiemagic

    Feedback wanted for first few chapters of unposted story

    Does something like this sound better? "It’s odd that the dream changed him into not one, but two girls. And the newly-named Rayna and Lillian could do without having to play both sides in a conflict between order and chaos." Unfortunately I'm not sure what can be done about the narrative being...
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    Feedback wanted for first few chapters of unposted story

    It's kind of a weird situation where Rayna and Lillian each have their own personality but they both still share the same mind, so the definition of person becomes a little blurry. At first they don't even know they have any separation, but the dream makes them realize their differences, and the...
  6. blushiemagic

    Feedback wanted for first few chapters of unposted story

    So I got the idea of waiting to finish writing the entire first book of my story before I start posting it publicly, so I can keep a regular schedule and minimize edits to already-posted chapters. But recently the chapter count's been climbing, and all of a sudden I realized that I don't want to...
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