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Good day to all! I hope you are all healthy and doing well. If possible, I need opinions about: 1) If my dialogues sound normal. 2) If I give enough, too many, or not enough descriptions. 3) If my grammar is decent or awful. Here's the chapter for which I need the feedback...

People from other countries also join and take part in sumo. https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Aonishiki_Arata I should not be surprised, but wow, it is cool.

You've taught me a lot. Thank you. Farewell, and remain and/or become happy and healthy!

The worst thing about scammers is that they do not only target famous authors, who know how to detect and deal with their bullshit. They also target the most vulnerable people and new authors in need of validation, exploiting them using flattery. Still, scammers often drop a favorite on a...

Yep, that's the gist of it.

No, third person: And And (Of course, this is not the entire chapter.) This is how I introduce the characters in the chapter and how I later switch between them (as they are in different places).

Sorry to bother you. My current story has quite a few main characters instead of just one central one, and the narrative sometimes shifts between them within a chapter (for example from Szarel to Ruda and back to Szarel here https://www.scribblehub.com/read/1950602-overcome/chapter/1951750/ ). I...

Thank you! To answer your question, I don't know how. By this I mean, I know how to press enter, but I think my perception of things differs greatly from that of other people. Each time I'm about to make a paragraph smaller, I get worried that the result might end up too small, that people might...

Yeah. Ask yourself, what do people think when they hear Tekken? Battles. Your original spin on the story is better to be saved for your personal OC fiction. Now, there are a lot of people out there; there are chances you'll find fans eventually, but the majority expect serious battles from the...

It is? I was beginning to read the chapter to give my input... Yeah, feels like an AI. Anyway, OP. For a Tekken fanfiction, chapter 9 is way too long to hold onto the main battle scenes. It should happen sooner. Brawls is one of the appeals of this franchise.

Good day to all. I'm trying to learn how to write books and would like a second opinion, if you have the time. My common mistakes in the past have included over-description, drawn-out and unclear action, and unnatural characters. Can you tell me how bad or good it is here:

Good luck with your story, and have a great time!

Hello, sorry about the waiting. First thing that I've noticed. You are writing in the past tense. But this is present tense: In addition to it, this feels a bit like screenplay or something that would work in a webcomic, not in novel. Unless it is magic, the sentence doesn't make any sense...

Thank you! That's the best I can do for now, but I'll try to improve and create smoother character arcs in the future.

Good time of day, I hope everyone is doing well. If you don't mind, could you tell me if the character changed her mind too quickly about the benefits of anger in this chapter? (to avoid reading the entire chapter, use CTRL+F to find " pale orange hue " and then go until the end of the dialogue)...

Their work. If something emotionally clicks with a reader in a story, or if it is intriguing enough (be it a clever spin of a plot, a previously unusual thread of the story, or simply more of the same and desired story), then a reader throws bucks to support their author. Or. Simply because the...

Thank you for the kind offer! Here's my story: https://www.scribblehub.com/series/1042505/hordedoom/ Feedback in this thread will be excellent.

Thank you for your kind offer. Here is my story: https://www.scribblehub.com/series/517935/duty-empty-dreams-and-trying-not-to-become-a-monster/

Thank you. Nice to meet you, too. My bad, it slipped past my editing. I corrected it to the best of my ability: