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If that's the case, then shouldn't his response be like : "I want to be like my grandma who can take on the demon army!" or something like that?

Why do you have to go OP from OP ingredients? Why not make it so a person can be OP from normal ingredients that have been cooked properly?

And he sound very careless. So what kind of feedback are you looking for? If you asking for grammar and sentence structure, then I say that you need to separate dialogues from thoughts and actual story. If you asking for how the story flow, then I say that you got a good start. But the main...

Your cover. Is that Rin and Len from Vocaloid: Servant of Evil? Although I loved the song, but where did you get that cover? By the way, I sent you a feedback comment on Chapter 1.

I checked it and sent a comment to your first chapter.

Yeah, dead link. Did you delete it? That one, my friend is a justified cause. You can't have dukes, generals, and princes go around destroying things and being total hooligans about it. If that's a prince, that's no prince but a brat and idiot who would make his country go to ruins from debt or...

Hey dude, your synopsis is really good! I can smell "Epic" coming off from your lines.

You still got some stuffs to improve, especially on 1st chapter. Check out your chapter's comment section

If I am not looking carefully, this part would look like a run-on sentence. - The real issue is this one: "He can afford nothing more than a glance at his companions, having to dodge and strike back at the same time." If I have to rewrite it, it would be: "He [ can only spare ] [Remove: more...