itsurboywill
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Hey just wondering if you guys can give me some feedback on my series I would appreciate it the name is called the bench warmer and billboard girl
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Posting the link here will help
itsurboywill
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The Bench warmer and the Billboard Girl
Minato is a talented yet deeply insecure left back who struggles with confidence.Exhausted form a late night travel team practice session he sleeps through the arrival of the school newest sensation: Emi a famous idol with shimmering light blue hair who is confident and also has her own flaws...
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The first chapter has hundreds (not a lie, checked it with Grammarly) spelling errors.
Your grammar is also very shaky.
Every single sentence has multiple issues.
I applaud you for not using AI, but at the same time, you desperately need something like Grammarly to edit your chapter. As is, I can't recommend it to anyone; it's absolutely riddled with mistakes and not fun to read.
So until this issue is addressed, I can't even begin to comment on the actual plot.
Your grammar is also very shaky.
Every single sentence has multiple issues.
I applaud you for not using AI, but at the same time, you desperately need something like Grammarly to edit your chapter. As is, I can't recommend it to anyone; it's absolutely riddled with mistakes and not fun to read.
So until this issue is addressed, I can't even begin to comment on the actual plot.
itsurboywill
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Yo I appreciate I will look into it