How to write without heavy repitition of certain pronouns and overstacking descriptions?

I have been writing for abt 4 months online, and the problem that ive recently been having critics say is that I repeat the word "he" a lot.
For my descriptive writing style, I've only now noticed and need to know how to not instinctively do this mistake
I have noticed myself that I sometimes overstock information as well and want to know if there is a way to refrain myself from saying a lot🥹

Edit chapters before releasing them. Don't overemphasize the speed of chapter release; consider the narrative quality of the chapter.

Emhd511 said:

I have been writing for abt 4 months online, and the problem that ive recently been having critics say is that I repeat the word "he" a lot.
For my descriptive writing style, I've only now noticed and need to know how to not instinctively do this mistake
I have noticed myself that I sometimes overstock information as well and want to know if there is a way to refrain myself from saying a lot🥹

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Mix in the names of the characters and sometimes make the object the subject. He ate an apple. The apple was eaten. But yeah edit the chapter after is honestly the better way until it becomes instinctive. It's far easier to write down a scene choppily and expand than to do it perfectly in one try.

Write up a list of descriptors.
If one character is a large, red-haired man named Bruno with a thick moustache, alternate between "Him," "Bruno," "The large man," and things like "The man with the moustache." Of course, this only works if he is the only guy with all these traits - if all your characters are large men, or red-haired, it won't be that useful.

CharlesEBrown said:

Write up a list of descriptors.
If one character is a large, red-haired man named Bruno with a thick moustache, alternate between "Him," "Bruno," "The large man," and things like "The man with the moustache." Of course, this only works if he is the only guy with all these traits - if all your characters are large men, or red-haired, it won't be that useful.

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Ohhh I should've thought of that I'll try to implement this when I revise my chapters

Eldoria said:

Edit chapters before releasing them. Don't overemphasize the speed of chapter release; consider the narrative quality of the chapter.

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I'm editing the first chapter as we speak🥹 no more repetitive words i hope🫠

YukieSama said:

Mix in the names of the characters and sometimes make the object the subject. He ate an apple. The apple was eaten. But yeah edit the chapter after is honestly the better way until it becomes instinctive. It's far easier to write down a scene choppily and expand than to do it perfectly in one try.

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Got it

I’m not sure if there’s a direct English equivalent, but I use a German writing program called Papyrus Author. It’s pretty expensive upfront, but it’s specifically designed for authors.
The software includes real-time spellchecking, highlights grammatical errors, and flags repeated words. It also provides a readability assessment — though I’m not particularly impressed with that part, to be honest.

I'll check it out

Some good advice here, but really, the best way to learn how to navigate these situations is to read a lot and read with a critical eye. How does your favorite author describe the events of their novel without being overly referential to their characters? How does your least favorite author? How does the most difficult author you've ever read do it, or the easiest author you've ever read? Paying close attention to others' styles and imitating them when you can (to figure out how they work) is the best way to learn not only how to do it yourself, but to develop a style that is distinctly your own.

CharlesEBrown said:

Write up a list of descriptors.
If one character is a large, red-haired man named Bruno with a thick moustache, alternate between "Him," "Bruno," "The large man," and things like "The man with the moustache." Of course, this only works if he is the only guy with all these traits - if all your characters are large men, or red-haired, it won't be that useful.

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