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I meant shot as in a kick to the legs. I'll clarify that later. Also I will say Teruya is high on drugs, so the idea is he's throwing a...

Your fight scenes are pretty solid. I add a few notes regarding pacing to increase the tension of the story. The pacing slows down...

While reading, there were several points that didn’t feel realistic to me, and I found myself unable to clearly visualize the fight...

Hi Jaymi, thanks for doing this — it’s a really kind idea. I’d love it if you gave my story a look. The title is HELL’S RETURNERS. A...

thank you so much for your feedback on my stories I thought of, edit, and try to write as much as I can. I got plenty of stories to work...

w what do you think the first chapter after the prologue should be realistically for Ben? I need all of the feedback and advise I can...

Honestly, this is something you’ll only truly understand once you try writing it. You can plan as much as you want, but until you...

Maybe you can make context or plot each chapters first for 10 chapters? So your plot will not stray too far when you write it. And you...

Hey, I’m really glad my feedback helped — and congrats on writing all of this in such a short time. Five hours for a first draft is...

do you think I got a chance for this story to get noticed in due time? what do you think of Ben so far? I hope you like him and I got a...

Damn! you've just given me a good hook with that suggestion. Thank you so much for reading.

Hi! I read your prologue on the Scribble Hub and wanted to share a few thoughts. First, I personally really enjoy dark fantasy, so I’m...

https://www.scribblehub.com/series/2200656/thunders-heir-the-reluctant-demigod/ I was wondering if anybody can actually give me feedback...

This is a very solid start. The pacing is good, the imagery is clear, and the voice feels natural. You have a strong sense of scene and...

It's almost impossible for the new member not to see my feedback. I wrote it yesterday, and today the person asked for honest feedback...