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I intentionally avoided deep immersion in the middle chapters. I wanted Leo’s life to feel “thin” and frictionless — the kind of...

Here's my advice... instead of showing off who you are, show off what you're capable of! Take a fiction that really needs feedback...

This is a complete short story (4 chapters), not a serial. I’m specifically looking for feedback after reading all four chapters...

Thank you for taking the time to read and write such a detailed response. What you pointed out—especially regarding how Alex’s feelings...

You said you weren't looking for grammar corrections, but I feel obliged to point out that you need to fix your dialogue formatting as...

Technically, there is no hyphen on the keyboard, so I use a minus sign. But for lovers of variety, I can recommend: Short dash (-) - the...

Hello everyone, I’m looking for some focused feedback on a completed short series I recently published on Scribble Hub. Title: The...

Scene 1 is my choice. Honestly, and I'm not doing this to be funny or anything, I read Scene 2's first sentence and my attention waned...

Don't forget sometimes we get tired of reading a predictable layout too. Like, we expect what the next paragraph is going to narrate...

Scene 1 it is. The question is whether an image forms in the reader’s mind. And that is already decided within the first two lines.

Appreciate the feedback! :blob_aww: I went for a slower start on purpose. I wanted readers to feel the orphanage bonds before throwing...

Thank you for taking the time to read and comment. I am unsure what sentence structure even is, but it seems to be something I need to...

I’ve read your prologue and your first chapter. It’s hard to give you any big-picture notes from such a small sample, but I’ve noticed...