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Sorry, we do have an experienced editor here, she is @LeilaniOtter But maybe you are half right, only a few editors are willing to...

Read your only other post on this forum. I don't think any 'seasoned editor', or just normal editor, would write like that. Sorry if...

Thanks for the offer. If ya don't mind, could you share your credentials or portfolio? I'm sure everybody who has a need for your...

No need to even try... it's getting SO OLD, SO FAST...

What is your goal? I mean if you want maximum readers you gotta do shoutout & review swaps on RR. If your goal is to create a great...

I don't really want to accuse you of anything, and I think you know that I already helped you, so I have good intentions, but either you...

The scene visualization is still rough and blurry. Readers might be confused about where your character is, who they're with, and where...

Rough transition, the character feels like they teleported from the gate to the arena because there is no kinetic movement showing from...

There are actually many criticisms I could make. But now I disike to burden authors with too many demands. I prefer to suggest the most...

Okay, is that the only problem you found? Or do I have to fix something else too? Thanks for replying.

Dude... after reading chapter 1 once, I noticed your narrative has a sudden POV shift problem that makes it prone to head hopping...

Do you like Warhammer? Because there "orks" are also spelled with k. Otherwise, you'd spell them with a c. So he is this noble...

Alrighty then... so, gonna treat your request with the specifics on personality, judgement, morals, likeability, and how you can improve...

Just for the record, yes, I wrote my story to "tell" more than to "show," I know that, and I will say sorry in advance if that bothers...

Hmm... I am still waiting for an answer 😭